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Cut the Brake Line
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 05:54:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Piercing sky as black as asphalt
A projectile fired from a catapult
I turn my head away as signs
Begin to melt into blurry lines
The moon is gone, it's hours past late
Already blinding I further accelerate
In my rear view mirror my life will flash
If meant to go on I will not crash
As endless fields are passing me by
With anguish inside I still wonder why
As I drift across the center line
My hands at my sides, this exit is mine
It feels so slow, it's so surreal
Just like my visions of twisted steel
What lies ahead as I change my gears
Can't see a thing through all of the tears
Overdriven
Can't escape fast enough
Can I truly vanish without living a day
I'm ready to meet what's coming my way
As I drift across the center line
My hands at my sides, this exit is mine
A darkened tunnel is where my path leads
The lights in my face are all that I need
No returning from this decline
I don't wish to stop, i've cut the brake line
Leaving dust on the road behind
Red lights mean nothing, i'm color blind
My time has come, let the end begin
As my limit is reached, the gauge is pinned
The wreck happened
Before I turned the ignition
The horizon never draws closer
As for the future, no one knows her
Who knew it would be this tough
Still can't escape this fast enough
As endless fields are passing me by
With anguish inside I still wonder why
As I drift across the center line
My hands at my sides, this exit is mine
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Vitreous_Soul
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2003-12-21 05:54:42]
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Re: Cut the Brake Line
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by P0rNStAr on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 06:27:37 AM AEST
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another great write by Virteous_Soul =P~~~
i have felt like this countless times and im sure more to come im sure many others can relate take care hon you'll get through it! wishing you happy holidays ty ^_- |
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Re: Cut the Brake Line
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by emystar on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 06:30:14 AM AEST
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Very strong write!
Awesomly creative!
peace, joy, luv,
emy happy holidays |
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Re: Cut the Brake Line
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by ShadowDaughter on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 11:36:40 AM AEST
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Wow. For lack of anything particularly constructive or interesting to say, wow.
This was absolutely fantastic, V. S. Worth every puppy-dog-eyed moment spent begging for it.
I could really, really picture this as a song.
You may be the only one who realizes what this means, but I think I'm gonna memorize this.
Nice job.
--Nora |
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Re: Cut the Brake Line
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by LouisaMontagu on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 01:51:13 PM AEST
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your adreneline your fuel
but soon it runs low
thats wen ur mota starts to slow....
I like ur work, sum1 has the ame idea as me x x |
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Re: Cut the Brake Line
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by secretwind on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 03:14:44 PM AEST
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AS YOU DRIFT ACROSS THE CENTER LINE.....I LIKE THI ONE,GOOD WRITE.
THE WIND..... |
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Re: Cut the Brake Line
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 07:52:46 PM AEST
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Very emotional VS...took me right along as the fields passed by....the brake line is severed....but sad too. That's what dark poetry will always do for you....leave you sad and blue. I love your loving poems that inspire and soar....leaving us feeling refreshed, and ready to roar!
But that's not to say....there is a place for dark poetry....it's just not for me.
lovingcritters.....and inspirational poems
ConSue *smiles* |
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Re: Cut the Brake Line
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by fallen_eyes on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 09:16:45 AM AEST
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Now this poem i really like. It seems to be one huge metaphor it really is a great poem. Im glad you suggested this as one of your poems for me to read. thank you. your poems are really quite inspiring for me to continue writing.
Tammy |
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