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One last tear.
Contributed by
EternitysLyre
on
Saturday, 20th December 2003 @ 02:44:24 AM in AEST
Topic:
Haiku
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Below are two versions
One last pause to stall
One last thought to end it all
One last tear to fall
(The original)
One last tear to fall
One last thought to end it all
One last dream appalled
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2003-12-20 02:44:24]
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Re: One last tear.
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by emystar on
Saturday, 20th December 2003 @ 03:22:47 AM AEST
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Both are good.
Hey, if I had to go by someone elses idea of a poem then I'd of quit long ago as mine is raw natural talent.
peace, joy, luv,
emy |
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Re: One last tear.
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Saturday, 20th December 2003 @ 05:52:48 AM AEST
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Very good haiku, and I find the rhyme pleasing. Good point about the english, too. Sort of justifies the rhyme.
Truly,
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Re: One last tear.
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by venkat on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 01:47:29 AM AEST
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| mmm..its o.k. venkat |
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