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Silver
Contributed by
Suz
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Friday, 19th December 2003 @ 06:46:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
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So long ago we said goodbye,
you kissed the silver of my eye,
held me close then walked away,
but here I am, still here today.
Your footsteps here have turned to mud,
the note you wrote is soaked with blood,
the silver of my eye's still wet,
because you haven't come back yet.
Copyright ©
Suz
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2003-12-19 18:46:17]
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Re: Silver
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by jaeann on
Friday, 19th December 2003 @ 06:57:34 PM AEST
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| very beautiful........but i pray the contest is not poetry.com.......you'll be surely disappointed ......it's happened to a few of us.......if not.....then i wish you all the best....and good luck........... |
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Re: Silver
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by Jellybellyprincess on
Friday, 19th December 2003 @ 08:11:33 PM AEST
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I think this is fabulous... kissing the silver of your eye is the best part of it.... reminds me of "For Emily...." by simon and garfunkel (been listening to that while typing....lol) ..."felt you warm and near, I kissed your honey hair with my grateful tears".... I don't know, abscure simon and garfunkel quotes..... hmmmm...
Anyways =)
This is such a great write. despite what you may think, I think it's insane. Hope the contest goes well.
God bless,
Ellen |
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Re: Silver
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by EmSal on
Friday, 19th December 2003 @ 10:08:30 PM AEST
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Oh I definately liked it. All the best with the competition! Let us know how it goes.
Emma. |
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Re: Silver
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 19th December 2003 @ 11:09:58 PM AEST
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Dear Suz,
Such an exquisite way of putting it. And I like Jaymee hope this is not Poetry.com they are just a bunch of crooks who take advantage of young poets. Get your hopes all up and then drop you like a hot potatoe when you won't send them the money to be published in their book! I even went to my States Attorney over them...nothing can be done....I hope you win lots of money and recognition...maybe this is not what I think.
Lovely poem
consue |
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Re: Silver
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by Elf on
Saturday, 20th December 2003 @ 04:10:43 PM AEST
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I think its a great write. Remember; you are your own worst critic. Simply because only you know how it should go. Thats what I thought about one of mine, and it was the one that got me into a publishing house.
-*Dixie*- |
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