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NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
Contributed by
jaeann
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Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 05:43:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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bubble in a box
box fell down the stairs
gate was broken purposefully
but no one really cares
tin man's in the woods
shoe box under the clay
secrets buried by the lake
must always forever stay
picnic table by the tree
the rope swings maliciously
flowered suitcase strewn atop
betrayal's paid back viciously
fire in the dead of night
cats are screaming at the moon
evil lurks beneath the stairs
pray for a storm break soon
corner stone market rendezvous
ice cream summers' crush
corn fed maze lost in the spring
one look and all is hush
dancing queen lies at rise of sun
a path to the open door
patience is virtue's tepid curse
disappearing through the core
kin folk are thinner than water
blue blood runs death ice cold
erase a non existant history
remembering all that can't be told
Copyright ©
jaeann
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2003-12-17 17:43:22]
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by MissLee on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 05:47:33 PM AEST
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| VERY GOOD and kinda eerie, liked it a lot though.... |
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 06:11:59 PM AEST
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OOOhhhhhhhhspokyyyyyy, Jaymee....but reminds me of a saying.
Secrets, Secrets, you are as sick as your secrets....But in this day....they are all being manifest...brought to the light!
This is a marvelous poem Jaymee...I could even see those secrets in the dark of night!
Spokyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Loved it,
ConSue |
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by Putteragain on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 06:21:57 PM AEST
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I agree with the others kinda creepy but awesome you made me feel like it was my past and i was really there
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 07:03:50 PM AEST
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scary and spooky I liked the imagery. Very well penned.
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by sicknivesevered on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 08:27:12 PM AEST
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| Nice imagery. I like the thoughts it streams though my mind. |
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 09:50:50 PM AEST
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It is night and yes I found your poem eery but compelling enough to read a few more times. It was like watching scenes from a movie, one frame at a time and trying to puzzle in the pieces. Vivid were the descriptions I saw in your poetry, remarkably vivid and very mysterious but addictive...
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 18th December 2003 @ 12:12:45 AM AEST
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| excellent, love this jaeann, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 18th December 2003 @ 12:24:50 AM AEST
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There isnt a rating high enough for this one.
Without a doubt one of the top dark writes I have ever had the privilage to read.
Larry |
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Re: NORTH LAKE SUMMERS
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th November 2011 @ 12:42:41 PM AEST
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| nice imagery |
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