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Breaking the life
Contributed by
cobalt
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Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 10:14:35 AM in AEST
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Raging against this storm
in the embers of this
eternally dying night.
Fallen from my light
but it's ok it's my norm.
The field I run through
is drenched in blood.
Lighting strikes me
clean this time as
the thunder hits the hills.
Honor stolen by your eyes.
Heart stolen by your honor.
Loved enough to die for you,
I've died enough to need you.
Tonight may I die
raging darkly against the storm.
Dying embers from this night.
The book of the faulty phoenix
Copyright ©
cobalt
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2003-12-17 10:14:35]
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Re: Breaking the life
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by Jacquelynne on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 10:23:02 AM AEST
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I love the part "
Loved enough to die for you,
I've died enough to need you.
Tonight may I die"
beautiful.
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Re: Breaking the life
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by loopylou on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 10:30:32 AM AEST
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| anouther very good poem keep it up |
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Re: Breaking the life
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by MissLee on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 10:52:53 AM AEST
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| Ditto to the first comment, plus it was a VERY GOOD WRITE...good job hon |
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Re: Breaking the life
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by jme on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 10:59:08 AM AEST
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| Your talent really shines in this one. Your versus were wonderful! |
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Re: Breaking the life
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by jaeann on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 11:53:29 AM AEST
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| fallen from my light..........yes!!!!! |
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Re: Breaking the life
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by Putteragain on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 12:20:22 PM AEST
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what else can I say
BEAUTIFUL
your friend
Michelle |
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Re: Breaking the life
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 01:52:32 PM AEST
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| whoa, this poem makes ya the next Dylan Thomas... hehe. Awesome Jeff! |
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Re: Breaking the life
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 04:08:38 PM AEST
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When I read--I've died enough to need you--Very, very powerful. Socked me straight in the heart and instantaneously I realized just how powerful it was....
Kie |
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Re: Breaking the life
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by venkat on
Saturday, 20th December 2003 @ 02:11:14 AM AEST
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Even though dark.. very emotional and beautiful lines I read in this poem:
"The field I run through
is drenched in blood.
Lighting strikes me
clean this time as
the thunder hits the hills.
Honor stolen by your eyes.
Heart stolen by your honor.
Loved enough to die for you"
well done my friend.. venkat |
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