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My Inner Funeral
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Tuesday, 16th December 2003 @ 10:05:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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scratched my wrist
with a poisonous thorn
(from a rose,
just to show you I care)
plunged in my quill
left a bloody goodbye
met Death's stony gaze
stare for stare
tears of flame
ran down my face
burning a path
as flames do
bringing relief
as I lay down to die
relief from thin
thought-strands of you.
and as the blood
ran down my arm
twining slow
rivers of red
I gathered my strength
and I opened my mouth
and I whispered
"guess what, world, I'm dead."
* * * * *
I sighed with relief
when I'd finished the task
though I still did not feel
quite, well-- whole
when I'd buried her body,
it took me a while
to realize
I'd buried my soul.
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ShadowDaughter
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by harshreality on
Tuesday, 16th December 2003 @ 10:16:25 PM AEST
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| beautiful. I hope you feel better! |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by SkYYBLu on
Tuesday, 16th December 2003 @ 10:28:17 PM AEST
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| Very solemn. I LOVE IT!! |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 01:42:56 AM AEST
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Wow my name is Oldephebe..and I gotta say these few lines of crimson bliss swelled this bitter bead of a heart right in my throat..I hope you're feeling better..you're very talented..blah I should have said.."right out of your eyes the dead glory leaps and singes it's shape upon the readers retina" or something like that..
truley devinely desolate exhalations..brilliant |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 01:43:52 AM AEST
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twining slow
what a unique line totally captured my frail attention... I love this I was drawn into the poem and felt as if I was scratching my wrist with a poisonous thorn. Very deep.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by DreamWeaver on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 02:22:00 AM AEST
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| WOW .... your talent totally shines in this .... perfect R&R .... and the words .... twined around my heart and stabbed me with that damned poisonous thorn as well ... just awesome ... Jan |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by EmSal on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 05:23:04 AM AEST
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Buried your soul - Yes! I Feel this...an excellent write, and do hope that you can get your soul back. Try hard. Take care now.
Emma. |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 06:08:22 AM AEST
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I felt every single letter of this incredible poem. The imagery, the emotion, the darkness all congregating into a masterpiece. I'll remember this for a long time to come.
Truly,
-V.S.
Oh yeah, I loved the title, too. |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by jaeann on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 06:10:06 AM AEST
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| tears of flame and a buried soul........good stuff!!!! |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by MissLee on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 11:05:08 AM AEST
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| THAT WAS EXCELLENT HON, sigh...I know exactly how you feel, you can talk to me anytime hon. |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by Cobalt on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 12:38:49 PM AEST
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| Mmmmm.... Such a dark imagery. It was quite a good write. I adored this one. Very good. |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by a_t0rtured_s0ul on
Thursday, 18th December 2003 @ 03:54:52 AM AEST
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| dark and suicidal, just the way i love my poems |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 18th December 2003 @ 11:11:07 AM AEST
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| excellent, breathtaking, awesome poem, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by Suz on
Thursday, 18th December 2003 @ 04:28:39 PM AEST
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| Nice work, sweetie. |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by Hope33 on
Friday, 19th December 2003 @ 07:38:05 PM AEST
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| POWERFUL......love it |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by Cancer on
Saturday, 20th December 2003 @ 02:44:01 PM AEST
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seemed like something you would read in a book of well-known poets. by now you know that that isn't mechanical flattery or an ego-feeding compliment. "unasked for yet pleasing morsels...." in all it's glory. i won't waste any more or your time with futile praise. just know that if i actually left a comment, it touched me deeply. and i'm not even going to call the cops.
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by Spazzo on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 10:19:02 PM AEST
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Breath taking write, awesome, and sad. I hope you got your soul back.
Spazzo |
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Re: My Inner Funeral
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by Scarlett on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 10:49:55 AM AEST
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that was breathtaking, everything about it was perfect, the r&r the layout, the lightness of the tone but the strength of the words.
"thin thought-strands of you"
amazing! you both inspiring and envy inducing but either way you are increadibly talented. |
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