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Blood Bath
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Monday, 15th December 2003 @ 12:29:13 AM in AEST
Topic:
psychoticpoems
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There you were again
Smiling so peaceably
As you fulfilled your 'expectations'
While glancing nervously at your watch
I smiled, unnoticed in the shadows
My nose wrinkled in disgust
At your every move
As dollar bills floated downward
You left a trail of them,
Like a slug leaves a trail of slime
I noticed them filter downwards
As you placed a dirty hand
On your trophy wife's silicone ass
I cut my hand to give myself strength
I closed my eyes and moaned
As the warm blood trickled between my fingers
That was when you noticed me
I froze in horror as you gazed upon me
Dollar bills oozed from every part of you
You turned away like I was a disease,
But YOU were the disease, the infection
You tainted what you walked upon
And I noticed your bastard son
Looking upon you with admiration
That was what sickened me,
And drove me to quicker complete my goal
I took a step closer to you
My eyes pounding with Fear
I swallowed my apprehension
Sidling up to you
I brandished my knife in your face
"Now you die *****," I whispered to him emotionally
And then... everyone and everything froze
Whether mute with fear or uncaringness I knew not
You screamed like a woman
And like two passionate lovers
I chased you outside
The reek of perfumed sweat on the air
And dollar bills leaving a perfect trail
I could've caught you easily,
But I prefered the hunt
I saw you, or smelled you first,
In the park where you were panting
And still everything was frozen
I leapt upon you and dragged a struggling YOU
To my car where I released you
And took out my custom made crossbow
Complete with 200 ft. of wire and crank
Like a fishing rod I smiled to myself
I aimed at your wallowing figure
My missile soared through the air
And hit you with a satisfying crunch
You fell instantly not emitting a sound,
But soon you stimulated me with a rousing fight
As I reeled you in you grabbed a pole
And raked your fingers futilely at the ground,
But it was only a matter of time
Until you lay sobbing at my feet
Your bloodied, earthy fingers sought your wallet
Brimming with dollar bills,
I sneered, and kicked at you,
Put my foot on your stomach,
And yanked the arrow out of your shoulder
Still you moaned and writhed on the pavement
So I pulled a crowbar out of my car
I raised it over my head
And struck you with it again and again
Flesh, dollar bills, and blood flew everywhere
Sweat dripped from my forehead with exertion
As you slowly molded to the pavement
Soon I realized your cries had stopped
With a tinge of regret that my fun was over
I pulled a sharp knife from my pocket
I reached into your mouth and cut out your tongue
I dropped it into a bag,
Saving it for later consumption, and grinned
I drove away, sticky with blood
It would take forever to wash the dollar bills off
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2003-12-15 00:29:13]
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Re: Blood Bath
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by Cobalt on
Monday, 15th December 2003 @ 12:34:03 AM AEST
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| Lol Joel. This was too good heh. I really enjoyed it. I am glad to have heard the news though. You're right this doesn't reflect your state of mind. |
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Re: Blood Bath
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Monday, 15th December 2003 @ 03:44:09 AM AEST
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:O
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:D
:D
eeeeeee!!! I LOVE THIS!!!
my god i was in heaven when i read this damn Joel have you been published and not told me?
dude and the metaphor of dollar bills and consupption(with the tongue)
and the flesh flying
oh hells yeah!!!
and dude like dude man i would be interested to see the happening fool that you just so happened to so murderously observe on the street that fateful day that spawned this deleriously wonderful peice of creamworthy fiction... |
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Re: Blood Bath
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Monday, 15th December 2003 @ 03:45:50 AM AEST
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BUTT i forgot to mention in my jubilee that the title is too cliche.
;) cheers, my exponentially talented and forevermore now esteemed friend!
C+ |
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Re: Blood Bath
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by jaeann on
Wednesday, 17th December 2003 @ 06:58:07 PM AEST
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| i'll be reading your novels with all the lights on in my house one day my friend....you have me under my chair quivering but still wanting more...... |
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Re: Blood Bath
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by CuttersAngel on
Thursday, 25th December 2003 @ 01:58:47 AM AEST
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| WOW!!!!!!! I was able to picture everything in great detail as I read through this.. I don't have the right words to express the rightousness of this poem. It's amazing!!! |
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Re: Blood Bath
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 07:13:30 PM AEST
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| aw...jeez....wow that was like iving in my worst nightmare...you can capture moment slike they were happening right in front of you...wow awesome, awesome, awesome I loved it...it was great...keep it up...keep it coming |
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