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If Only
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 06:16:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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So close yet so far away
The sound of your voice gets me through the day
Like burning embers are the feelings I bear
Desolate and lonely wishing you were there
Glass eyed I stare into the distance
Nearly obsessing, awaiting my chance
Focusing on one, as in the wind the trees sway
I pick up my ears to hear a haunting cello faintly play
If only there were time
For everything I want to do
As I sit and write this rhyme
Thinking only of love so true
I'm missing you
With every passing line
It gets so much harder to do
But I know it's just a sign
As sure as the sky is blue
I'm missing you
Alone I sit and try to understand
Building anxiety knowing my time is close at hand
So close yet so far from total bliss
But I know when it arrives it will be limitless
If only these emotions were something I could master
If only the hours could roll by a little faster
If only there were time
For everything I want to do
As I sit and write this rhyme
Thinking only of love so true
I'm missing you
With every passing line
It gets so much harder to do
But I know it's just a sign
As sure as the sky is blue
I'm missing you
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Re: If Only
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by Eve on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 10:37:00 AM AEST
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Reminds me of 'Nothing Else Matters'. And it's as good as, too.
Excuse me while I pick myself up off of the floor again.
Keep writing or I will simply hamstring you,
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Re: If Only
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by MoonlitAngel on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 10:38:07 AM AEST
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Awesome!! The description is great, I love the line about the cello. Very effective. I can relate to this, yet it has a very personal feel. Excellent write!
~ Moonlit |
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Re: If Only
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by Kie on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 11:21:10 AM AEST
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Speechless....
Just all around perfection....
Kie |
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Re: If Only
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 05:45:14 PM AEST
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I'm throwing roses again VS.
The remarkable thing that sticks out in this poem to me, is the timing! Perfect timing...in every line, a pause, some music, pick it up and write again....pauses can be so effective, & reflective in a poem, especially one as deep as this!
Truly a masterpiece, VS
lovingcritters
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Re: If Only
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 20th January 2004 @ 06:05:11 PM AEST
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Me again. When I read your writes I find myself leaning closer to my screen almost as if I am asking you to say it again. Isn't that odd? I am drawn into your words and I totally forget the brilliant comment I planned to write. Instead I ramble on and trying to say, "Perfection"....
"Glass eyed I stare into the distance
Nearly obsessing, awaiting my chance
Focusing on one, as in the wind the trees sway
I pick up my ears to hear a haunting cello faintly play"
I could see that in my mind, a beautiful piece.
Now I am haunted by a cello..
Kie
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