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this tattered dream
Contributed by
infedelity_hurts
on
Saturday, 13th December 2003 @ 07:16:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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sleeping sound,
undisturbed,
mental exhaustion,
its time to rest...
this makes no sense,
parts are missing,
your face is blurred,
my vision is scarred
this tattered dream,
it leaves alot
to be desired,
dropped into dreamland,
with a useless map,
and nowhere to call home
a confusing end
that stops
dead middle
i wake up
i'm sweating
let me back in
to this tattered dream...
drop me,
into dreamland
give me,
a useless map
i'll find a new home...
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2003-12-13 19:16:40]
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Re: this tattered dream
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by desertrose on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 02:35:18 AM AEST
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I like the beginning of this.
However the ending kind of tossed you Good write though
Rose
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Re: this tattered dream
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by infedelity_hurts on
Monday, 15th December 2003 @ 05:39:00 PM AEST
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@ rose.. well the ending ties in the fact that this person is sick of living a dream/reality and has decided to leave the real world and start anew in the dreamworld... now can you understand..?
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Re: this tattered dream
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 10:44:47 AM AEST
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Good write. I like your perspective in this one.
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