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so much noise outside
Contributed by
ruby1987
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Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 05:08:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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It’s half-past four on a Saturday morning,
And like a fool I wonder around my house,
I couldn’t sleep very well,
There was so much noise outside,
The trains on the track’s and the drunks passing by,
I stood in the bathroom and looked in the mirror,
My eyes were swelled up blood red,
I splashed ice-cold water on my face,
To ease my erratic temperature,
But still there was so much noise outside,
I opened the back door to find the sun,
It was creeping up ever so slowly,
So I warmed some milk and sat down,
Everything was so still in movement,
But still there was so much noise outside,
I closed my eyes and rested my head on the back door,
But it wasn’t even for a moment long,
Because the train tracks were on fire again,
I went back into the house and locked all the windows and doors,
But still there was so much noise outside
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ruby1987
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2003-12-11 17:08:35]
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Re: so much noise outside
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by full_blur on
Friday, 12th December 2003 @ 04:30:49 AM AEST
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| awesome poem! you describe every morning for me in vivid detail! I love it. |
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Re: so much noise outside
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 2nd January 2004 @ 07:50:35 AM AEST
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| THIS IS RUBBISH |
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Re: so much noise outside
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 06:11:07 PM AEST
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Just ignore the previous comment any one who knew what they were reading a) wouldn't have made a comment like that and b) wouldn't have done it anomonously.
So onto my comment i KNOW this is a good write!
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