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Can't do it again
Contributed by
Cobalt
on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 12:29:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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For all the things we've done.
For all the things we've said.
We've washed it all away.
Lied to you to save myself.
I lied to push you away.
Always and forever you will
have a part of what I am.
Love and a place in my
heart of hearts
and soul of souls.
You can not know this.
It would not matter.
We both feel that way.
Never would I tell you.
Though freely you say it.
Danced that dance
been there and done that.
Enough is enough no more.
I'd rather die on my feet
than live on my knees.
I'm sorry.
I wish I could stop.
I love you.
But no more.
The book of the faulty phoenix.
Copyright ©
Cobalt
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2003-12-11 00:29:37] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 12:37:39 AM AEST (User
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Hi cobalt,
I've just read all three of your last post.
They are sad but written well.
Good work!
peace, joy, luv, huggs,
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by mercedes on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 12:55:03 AM AEST (User
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I got to agree with emy on these three |
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 01:21:33 AM AEST (User
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These lines are very good:
I'd rather die on my feet
than live on my knees.
venkat
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 01:26:28 AM AEST (User
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wow i really liked how you expressed your feelings and I really liked the last line.. great expression in this and i like how you said that you won't put up with anymore.. awesome write!!
peace joy and hope
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 02:21:05 AM AEST (User
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Dear Cobalt, I try to read all of your poems, and everytime I read another, I see more improvement in everything. This was really an interesting write, Cobalt...it was smooth in the places it should have been and not in the places it shouldn't have been. I really enjoyed the last part...that's always very effective to impress upon one's heart!
Great Poem.
Warm Poetic Love
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 08:32:42 AM AEST (User
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awww......... so full of emotion this one is.
beautiful. |
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by eternal_sorrows on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 12:52:37 PM AEST (User
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Heartfelt, straight from the heart. And I can hear your words.
I'd rather die on my feet
than live on my knees....breathtaking!!!
es |
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 06:19:18 PM AEST (User
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Sounds as if yer giving something or someone up and don't give a damn good for you! I liked the tone in this.
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by jaeann on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 08:19:51 PM AEST (User
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sometimes love is not enough......... |
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Re: Can't do it again
(User Rating: 1 ) by Three_Blind_Mice on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 12:37:36 PM AEST (User
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wow, I guess I just didnt take the time to see how good you really are before now. Forgive me.. You have quite a talent my friend. This was another heartbreaker, but with a final message of strength. I really liked it.
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