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Unmarked Headstone
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
on
Wednesday, 10th December 2003 @ 06:20:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Ravens circle overhead
They glance about with wings spread
Sad music fills the air
I'm gone for good, it's just not fair
Loved ones mourn my departure
Tears soak the ground in torture
My body lies right below me
I can see my poor twisted destiny
The afterlife beckons for my soul
But I haven't yet achieved life's goal
Column of light draws me near
A strange calmness interrupts my fear
If they wish to visit me
The unmarked headstone's where i'll be
Lay some roses at the sight
Long thorny roses, black as night
I tried to die with dignity
Having lost my entire family
Mired in a deep depression
I wander around, consumed with obsession
So much to see, left to do
I look at happy faces and think 'me too'
I've never seen a dead man cry
I'm dead to emotion, that's no lie
The sun sets on the cemetery
Everyone's at home getting over me
Dead and forgotten like the rest
I'm now simply oblivion's guest
Darkness draws the sunshine in
With swift eclipse-like consumption
My thought pattern quickly races
As I stare at the blank and empty faces
What i'd do to again be alive
I'd do anything just to survive
But just shut the lid and bury me
And remember that the unmarked headstone is where i'll be
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2003-12-10 06:20:28]
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Re: Unmarked Headstone
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by loopylou on
Wednesday, 10th December 2003 @ 11:36:43 AM AEST
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| wow oozes with talent and its your first poem???this is really good |
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Re: Unmarked Headstone
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 10th December 2003 @ 08:09:03 PM AEST
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wOW VS...if that was your first poem, and you hadn't told me, I'd have never believed nor suspected it could be! That was great!...isn' it fun to go back and reread some of your own work....I think sometimes my first work was even better than now...I think we go through phases somehow. You can tell what kind of life I've lead just be reading my poems from different years to see how much I bleed! This was a very good poem, I've read it three times already!
Warm Love,
ConSue |
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Re: Unmarked Headstone
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by jaeann on
Thursday, 11th December 2003 @ 05:04:14 PM AEST
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| when we look back.....read.......and WOW.....we're amazed huh???? you brought chills to my spine with this piece.....brilliance at a very young age my friend.....do you feel like an old soul ???? |
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Re: Unmarked Headstone
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by Eve on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 10:22:08 AM AEST
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I'd die to write that well on my first piece.
No pun intended, really.
Keep writing or else,
-Eve. |
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Re: Unmarked Headstone
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 06:07:58 PM AEST
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Precocious. Indicative of the talent you've developed so far . . .
Far better than my first poem, which is also my first submission . . . |
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