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Sunken Treasure
Contributed by
juliETTE
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Thursday, 4th December 2003 @ 07:47:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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Somewhere deep beneath the Sea of Regret
Lies an ever poignant mystery,
A mound of all I should have done
Softly calling out to me.
It gets harder to resist the urge
To swim down and investigate.
If I can brave the lull of this tide
Maybe I would understand my fate.
Sliding softly through this pale white sand
All the passions buried in my chest,
Blow back with the force of the wind
I have always used to help me forget.
If I pull you from that resting place
Can my heart withstand the rush?
How am I supposed to walk away,
From what this storm’s stirred up in us?
I realize that I am not ready yet,
To leave the safety of this shore.
Long ago I left you floating at bay
And I stand behind my choice.
I guess it’s time for me to move on,
Amidst this mix of pain and pleasure-
You are no longer mine to discover
Only forever, my sunken treasure.
Copyright ©
juliETTE
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2003-12-04 19:47:22]
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Re: Sunken Treasure
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by keilajo on
Thursday, 4th December 2003 @ 07:49:51 PM AEST
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You stated that you wanted us to feel free to giving you any suggestions.
My suggestion is...DO NOT CHANGE OR ADD A THING. This is a very beautiful poem. A job very well done, I look forward to reading more. |
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Re: Sunken Treasure
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by Wrybod on
Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 03:50:28 AM AEST
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A lovely poem. I ca't see anything to alter.
bob |
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Re: Sunken Treasure
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by doug on
Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 04:30:44 PM AEST
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| a very good poem , keep it up your friend doug |
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Re: Sunken Treasure
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 5th December 2003 @ 04:40:07 PM AEST
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| vivid images, wonderful poem:) hugs n' love nessa |
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