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When you gaze upon her eyes
Contributed by
eternityslyre
on
Thursday, 4th December 2003 @ 11:51:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
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She claims she's but a normal girl
But you see through her lies
She's nothing like a normal girl
You see it in her eyes
You see the boiled passion and the effervescent dreams;
You see a world of unknown colors, you see her emerald gleam.
You're dazzled by the silver lights, you're captured by her dreams.
The rest will say her eyes are brown but looks aren't what they seem;
Her eyes are not some dreary tan--they're bright vivacious greens.
She's neither white nor black nor grey--she's something inbetween.
The world may think her odd or queer
She thinks them all a bore
But when you star upon her eyes
You love her all the more
You know she's not your average girl, you feel her fervent heat
She lives a life that's all her own, she dances with her feet;
She waltzes with her shadow to a song without a beat
She speaks a language no one knows and sings her unheard tunes;
Her smile shines like the golden sun and glimmers like the moon;
She's brighter than the summer day just seconds before noon.
And yet she claims she's nobody
She's common place and rife
But just by looking in her eyes
You've known her all your life
She splashes paintings in the air with colors of the wind;
Her thoughts are unpredictable--she lives upon a whim
And when you ask her what she means, all she does is grin.
She claims that life's a joyous game, rehearsing all her lines;
She acts to life's untitled play and giggles all the time;
Sometimes you wonder if she's right--"the best things are inside."
And yet she says she's nothing new
Her thoughts were all before
But gazing at those emerald eyes
You love her all the more.
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eternityslyre
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2003-12-04 11:51:05]
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Re: When you gaze upon her eyes
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by EternitysLyre on
Thursday, 4th December 2003 @ 11:53:03 AM AEST
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CRAP.
Stare* |
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Re: When you gaze upon her eyes
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by 13Hopes on
Thursday, 4th December 2003 @ 12:14:04 PM AEST
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This is a really greaty poem...
Cheers
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Re: When you gaze upon her eyes
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 4th December 2003 @ 03:40:44 PM AEST
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| This is an awesome write ... you have great talent ... I love the idea behind the poem, as well as how you set the verses out - could almost be a song ... Jan |
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Re: When you gaze upon her eyes
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by mercedes on
Sunday, 7th December 2003 @ 12:01:04 PM AEST
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| If you honestly think this is crap, im waiting to see what you think is good. I cant really comment on it, since im not much of a poet, but i did really like this. |
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Re: When you gaze upon her eyes
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th December 2003 @ 10:02:39 PM AEST
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Done that, been there
Can't find its way to the core:
Others could with it ay compare
And forgot it for ever more. |
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Re: When you gaze upon her eyes
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by venkat on
Friday, 12th December 2003 @ 05:46:12 AM AEST
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| very interesting and enjoyable write. |
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Re: When you gaze upon her eyes
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 6th January 2004 @ 02:42:14 PM AEST
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| Lol. I got the crap from the star part which was supposed to be stare. This was phenomenal. I love people like this. It had a sensual side to it for me. I followed it perfectly man. The way you ran with the lines was amazing. |
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