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individules with the same soul
Contributed by
loopylou
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Sunday, 30th November 2003 @ 08:14:38 AM in AEST
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ive been blind folded for some time
struck down by false smiles
and brocken dreams
finally i have stumbled across people
who understand
and do not hold shoulders that will judge a face
these people throw away hypcritisum in green and brown bins
each of us individules in a unique world
mixed with very specail guys and girls
these people are me
just diffrent sides and faces
diffrent personalitys
but not diffrent people
i am just anouther part of them like they are to me
we are a jigsaw that has discoverd the lost peices
they need me else they arnt whole
like i need them
and when we come together we hold no deception to the world
because we are what we are and we are one
we are strong
we are all acepted
in this crew a group of diffrent people
a group called
you
Copyright ©
loopylou
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2003-11-30 08:14:38]
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Re: individules with the same soul
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 30th November 2003 @ 09:01:28 AM AEST
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BRAVO, BRAVO TO YOU looplu!
What a marvelous ending, and so true. How did you ever think to come up with You!
If only more us could understand and find what you just did....we'd all be so happy, we'd never again be lonely or bored....being with you, just you, is the best group in all the world!
Roses, Roses,
This was a FANTASTIC POEM!
Lovingcritters
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Re: individules with the same soul
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by Kie on
Sunday, 30th November 2003 @ 09:41:17 AM AEST
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I like the way you write. I think you have alot to say and you express yourself well. I get a little sidetracked by the spelling errors other than that I think it is great.
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Re: individules with the same soul
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by Wrybod on
Monday, 1st December 2003 @ 02:58:48 PM AEST
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Good, and a neat slant at the end.
But oh that spelling!
.......blindfolded, broken, hold?shoulder or cold?shoulder. HIppocratic-ism? personallities, different, pieces, aren't, accepted....................
they combine to reduce the impact a little
(not a lot but it would be better without them)
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