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Stilt
Contributed by
CodyJ
on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 03:57:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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If you were to promise me the sun,
promise me the moon,
promise me the sky so blue,
promise to me that you will be true,
I would blackly tear this room apart.
I know you'd be lying to me.
Lying for whatever drives you.
Lying for what makes you whole,
lying for what soothes your white soul,
I can't trust you in matters of the heart.
If I were to promise to you my body.
promise you my mind and spirit.
If I were to lay down my silver expression,
and give you my last true confession,
you would leave me hanging in the air.
I would mourn the loss of you,
mourn for what could've been.
Mourn for what is beyond my red hands,
mourn for what I don't understand,
until I could tell myself I just don't care.
Copyright ©
CodyJ
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2003-11-29 15:57:43]
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Re: Stilt
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by JRR on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 04:02:39 PM AEST
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| wow, i like - I can relate to this fully. Well done! |
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Re: Stilt
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by Kie on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 04:14:00 PM AEST
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I liked it as well. You accurately portray the feeling of being twisted into knots on the inside.
Kie |
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Re: Stilt
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by Cobalt on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 04:38:21 PM AEST
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| I liked it. It twists nicely. I don't understand how the title fits but that doesn't matter it doesn't have to heh. It was a pretty good write. |
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