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Outline
Contributed by
sindi-selde
on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 03:57:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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You used to run and laugh and love and care.
You are nothing but an outline now.
A hollow voice,
An edge of despair.
You are nothing but an outline now.
We reach our hands out to hug,
You break them with your callus words.
You are nothing but an outline now.
You live your world in black and black.
You only have one crayon.
You are nothing but an outline now.
Ah, but you dream in color.
Reds and yellows and greens and blues,
So vivid that they hurt.
You are nothing but an outline now.
You are nothing but an outline now.
You are nothing but an outline now.
You are nothing but an outline now.
Copyright ©
sindi-selde
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2003-11-29 15:57:35] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Outline
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kie on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 04:16:29 PM AEST (User
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I loved this poem. If I had a guitar (and could play) it would make for a great song.
Well done!
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Re: Outline
(User Rating: 1 ) by ShadowDaughter on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 04:42:16 PM AEST (User
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Whoa, I really like this.
Definitely one of your better ones.
I like the repetition.
I like it all.
--Shadow |
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Re: Outline
(User Rating: 1 ) by EmSal on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 10:54:56 PM AEST (User
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Sad write but pretty good...
Emma. |
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Re: Outline
(User Rating: 1 ) by blueheart on
Sunday, 30th November 2003 @ 12:38:03 AM AEST (User
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Wow, very nice. Yeah, the repetition definitely makes an impact. |
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