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TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
Contributed by
lovingcritters
on
Thursday, 27th November 2003 @ 10:30:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Teardrops boundlessly fall,
slamming 'gainst my palm.
Shattered pieces of glass, invading
morass, with sudden impact,
tearing away my calm!
Haunting echoes, cracked bell, muffled
drums again whacked!
Another tear drop slides
down my lifeline.
Creased, wrinkled, closed flesh,
salty brine.
Enormous open sores, monstrosity of losses.
Betrayal, hopeless futilty, stolen booty,
branded agony in my groan's
sudden twinges!
On my knees, complete.
unadulterated surrender if you please......
All but my soul, no permission,
wrangled with ease.....
My guts openly splattered
upon life's sacrificial shrine!
Here is my heart, my life, all my tears,
my feelings, my time......
But one I decline.....Me......
You can never have Me.....
Is that clear?
Me in my entirety.......Me in my totality......
Take your pick, but you can never have...
My Integrity!!!
Created by
Cheri Cam LeBren
November 2003
Copyright ©
lovingcritters
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2003-11-27 22:30:51]
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Re: TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 27th November 2003 @ 10:47:10 PM AEST
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You show 'em who's boss, grrl..
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Re: TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
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by venkat on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 12:17:35 AM AEST
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| Wow, very deep feeling.. heart touching.. venkat |
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Re: TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
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by recalcitrant on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 02:48:30 AM AEST
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awesome poem. i think you can do away with the exclamation points i think they take away from you poem. i think your meaning is there but you should work on the diction. "stolen booty" for example makes me want to laugh more than take it for its literal meaning.
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Re: TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 06:54:00 AM AEST
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| Wow, this was excellent. Very deep. Definitely hit the mark with this one. |
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Re: TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
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by CrystalSilence on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 07:25:54 AM AEST
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In a word???
Brilliant!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (exclamation marks are ok in "my" book)
:)
Forsake all..but never your pride.Excellent poem |
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Re: TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
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by Wrybod on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 08:17:10 AM AEST
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Hi 'Mate
"This above all else; to thine own self be true,
And it must follow, as the night the day,
Thou canst not then be false to any man
Shakespeare- Hamlet
You stand amongst great writers
bob |
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Re: TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
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by jaeann on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 03:49:17 PM AEST
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| you go girl!!!!!! don't ever let it go!!!!! and i like exclamation points.........they are for exclaming your opinion.......just incase the masses don't get it the first time around... :) ...!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Re: TEARDROPS OF INTEGRITY
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by shelby on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 09:41:53 PM AEST
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very forthcoming deep and emotional write
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