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me and You
Contributed by
angel_facing_judgement
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Friday, 14th November 2003 @ 04:01:19 PM in AEST
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me and you a love so true. asingle star that burns bright blue..kiss me now kiss me once till the battle you have since won has faded half past in your mind..then that single star that burns bright blue turns a double star that burns bright red, its been calling all the while you have led calling you softlyto my bed..as i heard you say those three simple words that echoed back into my mind...you told mei love you.. so as i said i love youtoo
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Re: me and You
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 14th November 2003 @ 04:04:57 PM AEST
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| This was an interesting write. I liked this. |
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Re: me and You
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by Serendippitty on
Friday, 14th November 2003 @ 10:30:43 PM AEST
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| very sweet... |
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Re: me and You
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 08:44:50 AM AEST
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Beautiful sentiments and who can't relate to them? Try to line things up in shorter stanzas though. That will be easier on your reader's eyes. Some capitalization will break things up as well. You have much to say, but your form makes it harder for the reader to grasp it.
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