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They're Watching.
Contributed by
Yodo
on
Tuesday, 11th November 2003 @ 11:09:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I'm naked and I'm bleeding
I'm laying in the street
And everyone can see me
They can see my heart.
My soul is weeping
My spirit has fallen
And everyone can see me
They're watching my heart.
And everyone everyone
Everyone knows
Everyone sees this wretch.
Everyone is watching me.
They're operating on me
They've stripped my clothing
They've cut open my skin
They're probing my heart.
And everyone everyone
Everyone knows.
Everyone is mocking
They're laughing at my heart.
I'm naked I'm bleeding
I'm dying in this street.
The doctors are cutting
As the masses are watching.
Copyright ©
Yodo
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2003-11-11 23:09:15] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: They're Watching.
(User Rating: 1 ) by MrWrite on
Wednesday, 12th November 2003 @ 12:38:23 AM AEST (User
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There's not much of a rhyming structure, but that doesn't make much of a difference here. This is very heart-felt piece of writing. I truly felt the emotions that I believe you were trying to convey. Great piece, and I hope to see more of your work. Take care. |
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Re: They're Watching.
(User Rating: 1 ) by loopylou on
Wednesday, 12th November 2003 @ 05:06:40 AM AEST (User
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only certain people are like this but your right their are to many of them!!! |
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