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Fine take it
Contributed by
Cobalt
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Wednesday, 5th November 2003 @ 10:00:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Well I guess it's true.
When it rains
It most definitely pours.
Can't ever stop it.
It just won't let up.
Why can't I just
Sit down and cry.
Can't stop anything,
Not one from leaving,
Couldn't stop sickness,
Can't stop something
If you're not even there.
An accident happens.
Only thing that you may
have changed
is laying next to that person.
Another walks out
of your life.
So say goodbye
try to shed a tear.
Too bad you
are unable to cry.
I think that it's time
To just go back to bed.
I'll wake up later
and hope it's better.
Sadly when it rains
you know that it pours.
Copyright ©
Cobalt
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2003-11-05 10:00:42]
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Re: Fine take it
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 5th November 2003 @ 10:18:55 AM AEST
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you captured it well, sounds like you have been having days similair to mine lately. Great write.
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Re: Fine take it
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by LovingWhispers on
Wednesday, 5th November 2003 @ 10:37:24 AM AEST
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The way it builds up then settles again..just like you are saying it..Excellent!
I'm glad I took the time... |
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Re: Fine take it
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Wednesday, 5th November 2003 @ 10:40:23 AM AEST
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I don't think this sucked
It's hard to write feelings like this down
Let yourself cry... it'll do you good.
Good write... ;) |
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Re: Fine take it
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by Wolfareen on
Wednesday, 5th November 2003 @ 01:36:22 PM AEST
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| Nice poem..good rythm and everything..hope you find your umbrella, man. *****ty to get rained on so much. |
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Re: Fine take it
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by jaeann on
Wednesday, 5th November 2003 @ 01:37:32 PM AEST
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| mmmmmmm......yes it does.......written well !! |
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Re: Fine take it
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by katzie on
Wednesday, 5th November 2003 @ 05:16:18 PM AEST
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| Good job. Usually I stop through a poem half way because I get bored. Not the case :) |
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Re: Fine take it
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by Destiny on
Wednesday, 5th November 2003 @ 06:06:36 PM AEST
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| Awesome write, Not to be optomistic or anything, but remember; when the storm is over the sun always comes out. |
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Re: Fine take it
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by Merry on
Monday, 17th November 2003 @ 03:39:32 PM AEST
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i agree - i think they call it murphy's law when something can go wrong it usually does - and then it just seems to snowball from there. Well written - fatalistic point of view - but every cloud has its silver lining - well we can hope now can't we....
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Re: Fine take it
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by misstressdistrubed on
Monday, 17th November 2003 @ 06:29:50 PM AEST
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i feel that way too its ok to let go and cry sometimes and remember - we all must have rain to grow
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