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Thats why my mother cries
Contributed by
irshprnss
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Sunday, 2nd November 2003 @ 01:58:23 PM in AEST
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Each morning when I wake up and see the morning sun
till the second the day has ended and sleep has begun
I often hear a muffle, some would say a cry
I don't know where it comes from and I don't understand why
I hear it when I'm sleeping, and when I'm awake
I hear it with Cartoons on, with every breath I take
I can't run from it theres nowhere I can hide
Not anywhere known too man, believe me I have tried
I often ask my mommy about the sound that never ends
But she never gives an answer she just remembers when......
Then one day I found it, The sound that I did hear
It wasn't what I thought it, but most what I had feared
It was mommy thinking to herself about what the worlds become
It was mommy thinking how can she protect us? She is only one
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2003-11-02 13:58:23]
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Re: Thats why my mother cries
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by Baronhawk on
Sunday, 2nd November 2003 @ 03:00:37 PM AEST
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| Hmm... the end of innocence perhaps...how a child learns about the harsh realities of life. A difficult time for the child but a necessary rite of passage nevertheless. Quite an ok poem and topic. You might want to either tighten up the rhythm within the lines though...or break them up into shorter lines. Right now they are rather a mouthful and there are some disparities in the rhythm of the first part and the second part of some of the lines. They don't sound quite balanced....well anyway that is just an opinion...I am partial to tight lines and blanced rhytm myself...maybe youy are those freeform-type people....to each.... his or her own...I guess. |
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Re: Thats why my mother cries
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd November 2003 @ 01:53:09 PM AEST
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| i think that was great i can't explain to you how much my mother tries to cry silently and that at times i hear muffles but she never tells why she cries, but she does and i wonder why. you are really expressing your self keep it up I was really touched it made me feel like im not the only facing the same problem but there's other in my situation. |
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Re: Thats why my mother cries
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by jaeann on
Monday, 3rd November 2003 @ 06:47:40 PM AEST
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| being a mother myself now......and losing some of the same things my mother had..........i now know why she cried......because i cry for the same reasons ....... |
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Re: Thats why my mother cries
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by LOWMAN613 on
Monday, 3rd November 2003 @ 11:47:14 PM AEST
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I do this often as a mother cry in my own room,
Not really knowing if my children do hear,Thanks for this as a rwality getter to all! Christina |
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Re: Thats why my mother cries
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by desertrose on
Sunday, 14th December 2003 @ 06:44:16 PM AEST
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Beautiful poem of why mothers cry It is funny you never realize then suddenly your a mother and you know why mothers cry. Thank you for a most beautiful read :)
Rose
http://www.todays-woman.net |
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