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When we were together
Contributed by
michelled43
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Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 08:18:18 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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When we were together,
I loved your eyes and the way they seemed to tell me everything inside,
your mouth and the way it whispered sweet things in my ear,
and your arms that held me tight when I feared everything around me.
When you broke up with me all that bothered me,
your eyes and the way they looked right past me without feeling a thing,
your mouth and how it could say such terrible things when less than a month ago it was telling me "I love you",
and your arms that didn't long for me as I did for them
Now when I look at you I hate all of that,
your eyes and the way they look so deeply into hers,
your mouth and how it can tell her your feelings without thinking about me,
and your arms that hold onto her like they have forgotten about me
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2003-10-31 08:18:18]
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Re: When we were together
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 08:49:12 AM AEST
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| I really liked the way this poem is written, the style, very effective and to the point. Great poem. |
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Re: When we were together
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 11:51:14 AM AEST
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| I have read all your poems and I have to say you're so talented... great job with this Michelle. :) |
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Re: When we were together
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by SkYYBLu on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 04:42:44 PM AEST
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O MY GOD THAT POEM MADE ME CRY BECAUSE I FEEL YOUR PAIN BUDDY!!!
you are so talented. Keep up the good work... I had an unrequited lover once... he fled the city and to this day I don't know where he is... |
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Re: When we were together
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by DreamWeaver on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 05:50:55 PM AEST
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| I also cried when I read this .... the words touched me deeply and I love the way you used the same idea in each verse to express your feelings ... excellent write ... Jan |
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Re: When we were together
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by Jellybellyprincess on
Tuesday, 4th November 2003 @ 06:49:13 PM AEST
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Oh, this makes my heart cry..... I know what you're going through.....
I've started reading the complete works of michelled43, and this is so far my favorite. It just hits home.....
Lovely,
Jelly |
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Re: When we were together
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 31st December 2003 @ 05:36:19 PM AEST
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This is one of those writings that just tear your heart out because the person has been there. Very well written, I am left in awe...
Kie |
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