|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
The person in the shadows...
Contributed by
0o_Jelly_Bean_o0
on
Monday, 27th October 2003 @ 02:58:01 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
|
The feeling is coldness...
It leads to thoughts of loneliness...
Of times that brought sadness...
Events of bottled up emotions which festered into angryness...
There has to be a finger pointing blame...
Its tip is staring you right in the face...
You are peering into a mirror...
Are you to blame or the person that hides in the shadows behind your body.... at the back of your mind... in the most darkest part of your soul...
Tough Call.....
Copyright ©
0o_Jelly_Bean_o0
... [
2003-10-27 02:58:01]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: The person in the shadows...
(User Rating: 1 )
by Kindredblood_dragon on
Monday, 27th October 2003 @ 07:08:49 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
liked the bulk of the poem, but left at a loss to the last part
Tough Call.....
You started great but the ending needed more to it.
But then Im not the best of writters, but from what I've read of your work, it is good and yes you should carry on writting. |
|
|
Re: The person in the shadows...
(User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on
Monday, 27th October 2003 @ 07:28:22 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Very good writing!
yes, by all means keep writing!
peace, joy, luv,
emy |
|
|
Re: The person in the shadows...
(User Rating: 1 )
by jaeann on
Monday, 27th October 2003 @ 11:43:10 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
you should ALWAYS keep writing........posting is hard sometimes....we inherently need that validation factor simply because our own opinions just won't do!!!!!.....
write
write
write
even it's just ramblings that don/t make any sense........get it out........
i like your thoughts.......festered into angriness............i love that line......... |
|
|
Re: The person in the shadows...
(User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on
Monday, 27th October 2003 @ 11:56:30 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Of course you should keep writing. Don't get fed up when your not feeling creative or whatever. Sometimes a couple lines come to me in a week and then the rest comes to me next week. An example of getting fed up is your poem. The 1st stanza was awesome the rest could use a bit more work, but DON'T stop good grief.
Bobo (Joel) |
|
|
Re: The person in the shadows...
(User Rating: 1 )
by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Tuesday, 28th October 2003 @ 09:24:11 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Don't ever give up your writing.Too many people seem to lose their soul.I write because I want to, doesn't matter to me whether people like what I write.I'm glad when they do , but if not , I still feel enriched for putting down my thoughts and feelings.
Good luck |
|
|
Re: The person in the shadows...
(User Rating: 0 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th October 2003 @ 05:05:54 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I think you should definantly keep writing!!!! Love u... xx's liss |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
