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Second Suicide
Contributed by
PsychoticDreamz
on
Tuesday, 21st October 2003 @ 10:57:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Lost in the horizon
Sought for
But never found
Wandering
Helplessly
Movement without sound
Trapped in a forgotten world
Wanting all
torture to subside
Realization
Eternal pain
I've already died
Wiping away the tear's
Freezing trails
before they stain my cheeks
Crimson tears
steadily rendering
me unable to speak
It wasnt worth leaving
everyone behind
Thinking I'd be free
This Anguish
This hurting
Only worsened for me
Knealing to the ground
Cold silver in hand
Hoping to deeply slice
Too late for regrets
Razor's at my wrist
Once again to take my life
Copyright ©
PsychoticDreamz
... [
2003-10-21 22:57:39]
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Re: Second Suicide
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by BlackFire9786 on
Tuesday, 21st October 2003 @ 11:01:26 PM AEST
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this is so sad, i can completely relate to this, having tried it before, it's not the way to go, this was very well written i enjoyed it....if you ever need to talk feel free to pm me....take care
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Re: Second Suicide
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 21st October 2003 @ 11:19:18 PM AEST
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Well this was an awesome write I hope you were able to write your feelings instaed of actually doing this. i loved all of this but I think the 3rd stanza was my fave a great poem.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Second Suicide
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by Rain on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2003 @ 12:05:08 AM AEST
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| you lost me in the twist of words in the pain and death sorrounded me in pain sorrounded me in death i lost myself with in your words you put a peace of yourself in this and you've pulled me in as well. good job that rarely happens that i am sucked in to anothers poem. |
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Re: Second Suicide
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2003 @ 02:15:52 AM AEST
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Very creative write here!
We all consider the thought at times or I have in my past. I'm just thankfull that God got me thru the turmoil!
I think this will make others think twice before they give in.
Hang tuff as u have a global faimily out here to write for. We need ya as there's plenty to write about.
peace, joy, luv, hope,
emy |
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Re: Second Suicide
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by loopylou on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2003 @ 04:41:38 AM AEST
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the use of words is very clever here........
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Re: Second Suicide
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by Rain on
Friday, 24th October 2003 @ 12:28:49 AM AEST
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this reminds me of myself or should i say who i once was before i meet charlie. i liked this alot probley mainly in part because i relate. but still its a good poem.
~sara~ |
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