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dance on my foot
Contributed by
Merry
on
Tuesday, 21st October 2003 @ 10:44:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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tear away the misty veil
what do you hide there
in the darkness
that is your soul
remorse flickering
like a sputtering candle
not enough to ignite a fire
love grown cold and desolate
no place to rest my head
in this lonely land of the dead
who pretend at living
so full of self promotion
and false lighting tricks
that keep up the momentum
we move forward in a dance
without knowing the steps
until we stumble
and the music falters
with strains of embarrassment
while we endure the onlookers
amused by our fumbling
loss of dignity and self confidence
you offer me your hand
as if it really mattered
and i accept it as if i really could
the dancers move on
the music plays until the very end
~merry~
Copyright ©
Merry
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2003-10-21 22:44:59]
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Re: dance on my foot
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 21st October 2003 @ 10:57:13 PM AEST
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somehow i can relate to this
good write
Shari |
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Re: dance on my foot
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by Rakerman1999 on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2003 @ 12:10:40 AM AEST
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I found this to be quite sad...maybe just the way I am relating to it at this point in my life...I dunno. You write in a manner that gets into my head and wont leave.
Very well done my friend
Larry |
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Re: dance on my foot
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by DreamWeaver on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2003 @ 12:23:50 AM AEST
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| How true to life this is ... so well written ... I relate well ... Jan |
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Re: dance on my foot
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by Crow on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2003 @ 10:18:05 AM AEST
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| I agree, what a true write in poetic form, very good. Crow |
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Re: dance on my foot
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2003 @ 02:19:49 PM AEST
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This is surreal and has a beautiful form of visually vibrant spoken words.
Nicely done!
angel always...godspeed...joni |
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