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Painful Cries
Contributed by
zee
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Sunday, 19th October 2003 @ 04:22:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Step by step I open my ways thru hell,
Thinking strongly for all being well.
The sight of darkness scares me,
But it is darkness, which bears me.
False light misguides me to lose,
I find it straining as what to choose,
The Curse of evil forces me to change,
Very hard to bear its effect and range.
Cries of eagerness try to deafen me,
They try to lock up & overcome me.
Roots of bliss cut down by the sad,
They work overtime like a mad.
Words of hatred fall & linger there,
Being so weak to stop them or dare.
The tools of death, all in action,
Just vary always on my reaction.
The huge rows & columns make me think,
“We are nothing but pain” they wink.
The poison of terror always oozes by,
My struggle, they always try to stultify.
I wash away my dead spots with tears,
Removing ill will & all sorts of fears.
Facing all this I still move on a thread,
It will be over, says my working head.
People love to see all this in their dream,
I get it all live, with some cola & cream.
Copyright ©
zee
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2003-10-19 16:22:43]
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Re: Painful Cries
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 19th October 2003 @ 04:40:25 PM AEST
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SPECTACULAR...Zee....the emotions, the images you left in my head...great write...for dark poetry. This one I can read, and understand, some lose me, have to take my hand!
I really enjoyed this, Zee Great Write
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Re: Painful Cries
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by Saira on
Sunday, 19th October 2003 @ 05:25:32 PM AEST
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Wow! Awesome! Zee, you have done it again! Striking imagery!
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Re: Painful Cries
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by mercedes on
Sunday, 19th October 2003 @ 05:42:56 PM AEST
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| Great job, i loved this one. I have to agree with lovingcritters that I cant always understand the meaning of some others i read. The imagery on this one was great. |
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Re: Painful Cries
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by SinfullyTwisted on
Sunday, 19th October 2003 @ 07:20:23 PM AEST
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| I'll agree with the others. Great imagery! Although there were a few lines that didn't flow right, like ".....They work overtime like a mad." Of course, it could be just a typo, or I could be misreading. Otherwise, good job. Keep writing. |
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Re: Painful Cries
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 19th October 2003 @ 09:17:40 PM AEST
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| A beautiful symphony of painful imagery, was gripping from beginning to end, excellently written look forward to more. |
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