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Cautious Conscious
Contributed by
Saira
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Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 06:05:47 PM in AEST
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Running away from an inevitable, after the fantasy,
Fooling myself to think of making dream, a reality.
Not simply accepting the life that was mine,
Was living in the world of a blurry time.
Thoughtlessly thinking, why not act on heart’s whim?
But found my mind chaotically entangled in the webs of fears.
Peeking, a little blithe girl, from subconscious’s rim,
But cautious conscious pushed her back, like I did with my tears.
Showing, the Fate, funny sides of its mercurial moods,
Left me blindfolded to perceive my life vividly.
Groping for the right way out of life’s cryptic routes,
But fell down in despair and got my soul bled profusely.
Now standing again in the blackness, but know what I must do,
Have chosen a blank road, O God! Please help me go through…
Serenely and happily as these feelings are still strangers to me,
I am hoping, at the end of the tunnel, a blissful light to see.
Copyright ©
Saira
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2003-10-17 18:05:47]
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Re: Cautious Conscious
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 06:12:46 PM AEST
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Very inspiring write, Saira..Thanks for sharing it..
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Re: Cautious Conscious
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by Zee on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 06:42:11 PM AEST
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A very beautiful complex work of emotions scattered all over in each and every line of u r peom! I like the way u have written it a lot!! Excellent write!
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Re: Cautious Conscious
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 08:19:45 PM AEST
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| I truly love the line "But cautious conscious pushed her back, like I did with my tears." we do get torn apart b/w our two selves, one which wouldn't stop dreaming, nor willingly part away with them, & the other side that would never let us turn a blind eye to the life's reality, for long. My kinda poem. Kudos Saira, more so as it ends on a optimistic note, some day the twine may meet. ( i am again daring to hope & this time my brain is willing to go along ;) ---- kj,(another Crab). |
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Re: Cautious Conscious
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by DreamWeaver on
Saturday, 18th October 2003 @ 12:24:46 AM AEST
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| Great poem! Love this Saira ... I relate so well and understand your feelings exactly ... Jan |
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Re: Cautious Conscious
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by venkat on
Saturday, 18th October 2003 @ 01:34:43 AM AEST
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great write..last stanza makes it a great poem..you may not be conscious of it's importance..great sages who meditate on God pass through such tunnel through their hearts to find the blissful light and to merge
into that universal divine self. venkat |
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Re: Cautious Conscious
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th October 2003 @ 04:53:45 PM AEST
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| what a wonderful write, so many feelings here. Crow |
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Re: Cautious Conscious
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 26th October 2003 @ 07:33:06 AM AEST
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Dear Saira,
What a thought-provoking poem I've read it three times now and will read it again before I leave your site.
All spiritual minded people go from one level, to another. In my 40 years, I think I've run out of places to roam...not so...every single day is a new one for me. Enlightenment, and glee!
What a Marvelous Poem Saira....and it's comforting for me to know that I have company on my journey too!
And so upbuilding, leaves your readers with a good feeling!
lovingcritters
ConSue
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