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exit wound
Contributed by
Merry
on
Thursday, 16th October 2003 @ 05:56:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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sandpaper of your tongue
franchise the kissing
and pack up the bus
pretend anything you want
act like an actor
and you will be one
say the right words
at the right time
and traffic lights
turn from red to green
caressing motion has to stop
you are thrilling me
there is a delicious man in you
boyish smile and somewhat cynical
in just the right proportions
stirs up a magic recipe
i used to call it love
but i know better now
we can travel like this for days
with nothing to slow us down
desert plains with perfect color schemes
i paint murals on your naked skin
while you sing to me in spanish
i don't understand a word
there is temptation
there will be hell to pay
maybe tomorrow
drive all night up into the hills
by daylight - mountains kiss the sky
you insist we can eat roadkill
i watch you cook it on an open fire
wind blows my hair across my eyes
i see you like a dream
disguised by the blurring lines
and hues reflected off of me
escapist reality
threads of a fantasy
that is what i see
as the sun ducks behind a cloud
and there will be an exit wound
right through my heart
~merry~
Copyright ©
Merry
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2003-10-16 17:56:30]
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Re: exit wound
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by LovingWhispers on
Thursday, 16th October 2003 @ 06:37:31 PM AEST
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WOW Merry this is great..The imagery is excellent..
"i paint murals on your naked skin
while you sing to me in spanish"
Love these lines :) |
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Re: exit wound
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 16th October 2003 @ 06:39:46 PM AEST
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| This is a superb write ... I love the metaphors ... There is nothing more thrilling than this kind of fantasy, but you are right and ended it perfectly - there will be an exit wound right through your heart ... Jan |
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Re: exit wound
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by Breezer08 on
Thursday, 16th October 2003 @ 07:00:09 PM AEST
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WOAH! I wish I could write something like THAT! I know exactly how all of that feels. Painting murals on your loves naked skin. Omg! You are a superb writer and I hope that you go far someday! *Looks like you are a deep emotion-feeler like I am! YAY! I'M NOT THE ONLY ONE! Hehe!* Anyway, I hope that you write a LOT more! Keep it up and have a good write! Catch you on the flip side!
~.*.~Breezer~.*.~ |
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Re: exit wound
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by Philipa on
Thursday, 16th October 2003 @ 08:03:30 PM AEST
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" paint murals on your naked skin
while you sing to me in spanish"
Now where is that LOL emodicon when you need it. Ahhh merry if they only knew......*sigh*
Philipa |
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Re: exit wound
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 16th October 2003 @ 08:38:09 PM AEST
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Merry Merry quite contrary,
How your words do flow,
You write of schemes and sexy dreams,
And cause my blood to flow. lol..
You have quite the imagination my friend and are an extremely talented writer. :o)
Larry |
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Re: exit wound
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by venkat on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 03:06:38 AM AEST
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| Awww, Merry.. my dear friend ..your fantasies have a great seductive charm. wonderfully written.. venkat |
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Re: exit wound
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 02:10:00 PM AEST
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| ive said it before and will say it again, i love your style and poetry, very refreshing, real, and beautiful, i always look forward to more:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: exit wound
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by Saira on
Saturday, 18th October 2003 @ 09:08:23 AM AEST
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Kudos Merry! This is an awesome write...very impressive!
Saira |
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Re: exit wound
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by PoeticReign on
Saturday, 18th October 2003 @ 07:41:03 PM AEST
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'act like an actor and you will be the one"... great line... and i like the ending... good write, Merry
~Nikki |
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