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Once Upon A Lifetime
Contributed by
Opium
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Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 01:42:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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ACT 1: Birth
In a blinding light life welcomed him
A newborn son of existence whim
Cursed forever in a timeless place
To carry the blight of the human face
Following the same path, like a ghost
Blind eyes, his mind blinded the most
Taught of fairytales from above the stars
Carrying those stories like a cross, like Jesus' scars
ACT 2: On The Rise
Age and him still walk the path of life
Now he has two kids and a lovely wife
Passing on the legacy of his elders
Dreams of heaven with all its splendors
In a darkened night a candle he lit
Near Christ's statue of shattered mitt
Asking the best for his growing kids
To keep them chained in these endless grids
ACT 3: Demise
Weary lies, an old man in bed
Next to him the sheeps he led
Now he waits for his lifetime friend
Disappointment guards his bitter end
In fear and loneliness the old man dies
Eyes opened, he left in a silent demise
A question he wrote where no on else could see
... " God, why have you forsaken me? "
ACT 4: The Truth
They all have journeyed once upon a lifetime
Where lies in the end an empty promise in a silly chime
Remember well, what awaits is a lonely death
As friends and lovers guard your final breath
I wish I could use a pen again
To write all what's in my brain
But now I just wait my lifetime friend
At least he's "truth" in my bitter end
Copyright ©
Opium
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2003-10-13 13:42:24]
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Re: Once Upon A Lifetime
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by sicknivesevered on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 06:19:12 PM AEST
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| Good job. I like the way you wrote it. |
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Re: Once Upon A Lifetime
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 06:52:15 PM AEST
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| Awesome write ... well put together ... Jan |
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Re: Once Upon A Lifetime
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by WiLlYwOnKa on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 07:55:07 PM AEST
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| The way you write it goes with the poem. And I like that a lot. Especially Act 4: The Truth. |
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Re: Once Upon A Lifetime
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by gina on
Saturday, 18th October 2003 @ 04:02:43 PM AEST
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gr8 take on life
"Remember well, what awaits is a lonely death
As friends and lovers guard your final breath"
we all want FRIENDS and lovers in this time, but we also need them b4 , dont u think?
Gina |
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Re: Once Upon A Lifetime
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 8th November 2003 @ 01:29:15 PM AEST
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a masterpiece....Hats off to you for this one my friend. very well done
Larry |
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