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Absent Tunnel LIght
Contributed by
jaeann
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Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 12:37:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Cast off from his side
she was longing for a way
to be important in his life
hoping maybe some day.
She reaches out to hold him
he blindly slips on by
she's an afterthought within his mind
one day she'll no longer try.
She saw the look upon his face
as she crumbled in his sight
building walls to shield herself
she knew she'd run in flight.
The promise is always broken
a quest to own some piece of her
and once the box is opened
only the hatred stirs.
It's better just to hide from him
every nuance of the pain
he'll not wish to understand it all
nor care he's part of the same.
Travels to the hurt exist
she alone can make the trip
sometimes making detours
from solace she will slip.
She'll not forget her sacred vow
one made unto herself
that as soon as they show disgust
she'd jump down from her shelf.
She'd run into the forest
a trail of tears is all to find
he turned his back and walked away
she left her soul behind.
She pops a pill and rolls the smoke
a shell of what she'd been
he climbs the hill and cracks the joke
validating every sin.
Copyright ©
jaeann
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2003-10-13 00:37:32]
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by Ilhar on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 12:43:25 AM AEST
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again so very well written
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by hope on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 12:44:34 AM AEST
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i absolutely loved this one. I love your style....keep 'em comin.
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 12:47:24 AM AEST
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loved this...good write...
Jenni |
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by EmSal on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 01:15:25 AM AEST
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Wow the hurt...I can definately feel it through your write, which was outstanding. Thanks for sharing this.
Emma. |
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 01:27:13 AM AEST
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Written beautifully jaymee...the hurt always come through...I'm so very sorry for you, but I know you'll see your way to go too!
I pray someday soon you will have peace within your mind and soul!
Lovingcritters,
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 02:25:22 AM AEST
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| Your pain so very well expressed ... an excellent write ... Jan |
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by venkat on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 05:19:05 AM AEST
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Expressed well..wrapped in despair as if it is inevitable..any way..well written. venkat
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 11:55:04 AM AEST
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| so full of vivid images and how i was repulsed by him in the ending, i love your title too:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by POOBEAR on
Monday, 13th October 2003 @ 06:36:14 PM AEST
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Dear jaeann,
Another so beautifully written. I can feel
the pain in your words and I am so sorry
that you have to feel it.
Lots of Hugs,
Lynn |
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Re: Absent Tunnel LIght
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by Crow on
Wednesday, 15th October 2003 @ 07:24:39 PM AEST
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| great piece, I like all your work. Crow |
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