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Surfacing Through the Riptide of Life
Contributed by
Tanna
on
Friday, 10th October 2003 @ 09:01:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Pulling me under
This riptide of life
I struggle, I curse, I sacrifice
And swim against all I abhor
Head above water
Greedily sucking in air
Cold waves crash over, almost to much to bare
Knowing what the water draws at me for
Dragging me under
No Savior in sight
Struggling to breathe, softly fades the light
My essence feels drained and sore
Heartbeat slowing
Vision becoming clouded
Tendons popping, eyes now shrouded
The riptide is giving me a ravaging tour
Break for the surface
In this ocean where I've been banished
Coherent thought has all but vanished
Instinct forces me to break for the surface once more.
Copyright ©
Tanna
... [
2003-10-10 21:01:01]
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Re: Surfacing Through the Riptide of Life
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 10th October 2003 @ 10:00:44 PM AEST
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Great imagery here..... loved this....
Jenni |
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Re: Surfacing Through the Riptide of Life
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by DreamWeaver on
Saturday, 11th October 2003 @ 12:03:46 AM AEST
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| I loved the metaphors here ... great poem ... ummm Tanna, did you say "choppy" in your opening comment? :)))) I liked that - nice touch ... Jan |
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Re: Surfacing Through the Riptide of Life
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by venkat on
Saturday, 11th October 2003 @ 03:28:47 AM AEST
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| very good imazery..take a fresh breath.. venkat |
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