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Unreal.
Contributed by
smilez_n_frownz
on
Thursday, 9th October 2003 @ 08:38:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You call me stupid and fat,
but yet you are so smart,
so fine,
God, believe me you don't blow my mind,
your rude,your sick,
your just a big prick,
call me down,
but no way you will put me down,
I'm not scared to tell you off,
how I feel it's unreal,
you hurt to laugh,
make me cry,to tear,
what's your life?
and your fear?
why do you hurt?
make pain and tears?
in my eyes,
your just a lie,
you wait,you'll cry.
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2003-10-09 20:38:43]
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Re: Unreal.
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by sharif on
Thursday, 9th October 2003 @ 08:47:04 PM AEST
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| I like it, the only thing: the Your rude etc. part should be you're, not your. That'a all, other than that, I like the perspective of the poem. It reminds me of "Don't think twice, it's alright" by Bob Dylan. |
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Re: Unreal.
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by loopylou on
Friday, 10th October 2003 @ 10:30:26 AM AEST
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your poem is great when i say its your poem i mean it really is your poem coz its about you being strong it oozes with strength. you hold your head up high your as good as anyone else put on this earth
you smile now
lou |
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