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Submission
Contributed by
Etah
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Thursday, 9th October 2003 @ 05:31:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Bitter blade bit pale skin
To bring the pain out from within
A desperate cry that none may hear
Cuts through the air to disappear
A plea for help that none may see
Now stains the skin in front of me
Thoughts are blades through troubled minds
Tearing skin to feel alive
A violent kiss for one alone
How my life has changed its tone
Frustration and a helpless tension
Slung me to a new dimension
Weary eyes watched desperate hands
Wage a war on foreign lands
Copyright ©
Etah
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2003-10-09 17:31:06]
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Re: Submission
(User Rating: 1 )
by Aika on
Thursday, 9th October 2003 @ 06:08:24 PM AEST
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another sad poem,
you write really great
but I still feel so much pain
and wish it was gone
wish to give you what you need
to make you happy
and if all of us could make you smile
just for a short short life while
will be great.., just be strong.. aika:-)
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Re: Submission
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by hope on
Thursday, 9th October 2003 @ 07:33:20 PM AEST
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| That was so sad...but very powerful. I can feel the pain. |
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Re: Submission
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by jaeann on
Thursday, 9th October 2003 @ 07:51:14 PM AEST
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| this is sad........the futility is so evident......great write!!!!!! |
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Re: Submission
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 10th October 2003 @ 08:43:34 PM AEST
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I liked this a lot i really did reminds me of stuff I right. 'Tearing skin to feel alive' a very vivid line...
Bobo (Joel) |
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