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reflection
Contributed by
ladyfawn
on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 04:45:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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his life was safe and organized
until she wrecked his heart n' head
left tomatoes on his counter
mucked the sheets up in the bed,
when his life was nicely fitted
he never thought about these things
those sheets now freshly washed
he longs the happiness she brings,
now the poor man's life's in ruins
the place she sat, now where he sits
left him love's air when she had to go
on lonely veranda he contemplates,
he eats a can of sardines one at a time
thinks about the things she left behind
her roast that filled the air devine
he says "i know loves really mine"
her essence lingers everywhere
he smells her purfume on forgotten shirt
wants to run his fingers through her hair
he's missing her, and ooooo it hurts,
what to do with her, he wonders
as he sits n' paces thinking about his life
if a million dollars fell from the sky
this day he'd make her his wife,
the whole damn bed seems empty
and his world now empty as well
whatever shall he do?
organizing tomatoes alone is hell.
°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*
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2003-10-06 04:45:00]
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Re: reflection
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by LovingWhispers on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 05:10:53 AM AEST
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LMAO..sorry but that last line cracked me up..im sure you understand and forgive my humour by now my friend ;)
Poor guy...now HE'S got it bad..
aw ww you two....You make me all mooshy inside...ahhhh its GREAT!!
Beautiful,funny,sweet,gorgeous write Ness
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Re: reflection
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by venkat on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 05:23:21 AM AEST
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| very funny..quite entertaining.. venkat |
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Re: reflection
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by Ilhar on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 06:00:07 AM AEST
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wonderful
Shari |
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Re: reflection
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by Bongo on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 11:30:34 AM AEST
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The kitchen now reorganised
The bathroom mat now dry
I walk around so sanitised
And ask myself "Now why ? "
My daily life now empty
One thing left that tempts me
Why not visit this dear lady
On her farmstead so slow and lazy
Reorganise her children, to think my way instead
And place those red tomatoes, right inside her bed.
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Re: reflection
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by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 11:38:52 AM AEST
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You know, it's so true the way all those little things you never really think about suddenly become so different after you do them with *someone* and then find yourself doing them alone again... it's kinda strange. This is so adorable, I just wanna pinch both your cheeks if I could... lol. Way to whip him with your charms! ;)
~ Dee |
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Re: reflection
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by norm on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 03:31:13 PM AEST
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We have to wonder now how to think,
is it love or maybe just the kitchen sink?
A man can become, confused and real dumb,
figuring out the totals and sums.
Is she do, Is she don't, it's a flip of a dime,
Like pulling petals from a daisy in time,
If your life's on go, take a shot, sir Bongo,
And marry and hope and put it in rhyme.....
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Re: reflection
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 05:27:19 PM AEST
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Lovely and interesting write, Ness... Now, see what you've done to this poor guy...lmao.
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: reflection
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 05:28:05 PM AEST
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Lovely and interesting write, Ness... Now, see what you've done to this poor guy...lmao.
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: reflection
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by Merry on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 10:16:03 AM AEST
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Nessa
this is sweet, romatic, funny, and a bit sad as well. hope you two get together real soon
un beso
merry |
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Re: reflection
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by jaeann on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 10:12:02 PM AEST
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| i LOVE this!!!! awesome!! |
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Re: reflection
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by LiveTheDream on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 02:16:43 PM AEST
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I really enjoyed reading this and the sort of storyline that went with it-brilliant!Nice choice of words too, enjoyed the line"if a million dollars fell from the sky" Another brill poem!
xxxx
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