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Your Screams Made me whole
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 10:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I hear the pitter-patter of little feet
As these morbidly pleasant images return
I stroked your supple, milky skin
As I feasted upon your screams
They made me whole
Wrapping their gluey fingers around me
Encroaching and encircling me
As I stroked you with my razor
I have you now you wouldn't have me before
So now we'll do things my way
Your stubborn and proud,
But I can see the tears coming
And your chin bowed in defeat and disgrace
You'll never be the same
And you'll never leave this prison
I licked you and tasted your skin
I defiled your sanctity
You screamed and pleaded with me to stop,
But all I heard was your screams for more
Your body heaved and I felt
The firmness of your buttocks
I touched your blonde hair lovingly
And felt your blood-flecked lips
(I can still taste your blood on my finger tips)
You welcome every demonic torture I can think of
The voices in my head told me more in the solitude
To do away with you would be a sin,
But I can smell the searchers
At school they cry and pray for your safety
I couldn't choke the bitterness down
As I prepared myself for this deed
As I gazed upon your beauty
The cuts oozing blood (I tasted it)
One beautiful eye swollen shut
I climbed on top and gave you everything
I felt you once more
And we ate our last supper
And then I ended it
Your hair matted with gore
I caressed your every scar
(I knew them well)
As you shuddered your last breath
I wept every tear I owned
Wrapped you in festive packaging
And left you to be found
I still remember how
Your screams made me whole
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by LovingWhispers on
Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 10:25:10 AM AEST
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| Too freaky for me*locks doors and windows* |
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 10:29:52 AM AEST
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| Well written from a poets point of view...but a horrible subject to write about. ( You watch the door LW..I'll keep an eye on the windows ) |
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Philipa on
Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 02:18:22 PM AEST
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Creepy, seductively sick and...well written. I'm with the other two in the house....holding an ax.
Philipa |
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by jaeann on
Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 02:43:31 PM AEST
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well right now you have me in a corner terrified....good thing everyone else is in the house because i haven't the courage to even be aware of anything more than my shivering....these words have been uttered in my lifetime.....you actually gave me the psychotic point of view....thank you...i think!!!
on a purely serious note....this piece is haunting........familiar.....breathtaking.... mesmerizing...... your work gives me a panicky feeling!!! |
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Kalika on
Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 02:57:34 PM AEST
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i'll be hiding in the corner, if thats ok with u three. A bit too vivid I think but well written.
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by deadly_blaZe on
Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 04:03:20 PM AEST
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disturbing write joel... wow... way to capture their viewpoint
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by SinfullyTwisted on
Tuesday, 30th September 2003 @ 04:09:02 PM AEST
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| -That- one gave me the chills! Seductively sick indeed! Great write. Bloody loved it, in a perverse, twisted little way. Creepy, but fantastic. Keep writing. |
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st October 2003 @ 10:08:27 AM AEST
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First of all, I'm sitting here crying now because this brought back so many memories for me, but on a lighter note I thought this poem was amazing. The creepy, haunting, vividness of this poem just really, wow, I loved it, even though it was a hard thing to read because of the memories, it still made me see it from the psychos point of view [well sorta] and I guess in a way it helped me aswell because I was one of the lucky ones who got away with my life. Saddly some aren't so lucky. Anyway I'll stop my ramblings. Great poem, and now I'm with the others - going to lock the doors and what not and to make sure my dog is close by :P
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Ruby1987 on
Thursday, 2nd October 2003 @ 02:31:21 PM AEST
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| I think I get it, yes I understand its a great write Joel and it really made me think. I would not lock my doors and windows I ain't afraid. |
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Avarice_Riot on
Saturday, 4th October 2003 @ 02:26:07 AM AEST
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Whoa....I'm so perversely fascinated by this. It's sick, really sick, but captivating and ingenious at the same time. Lol, with the kind of mind I have, I'd probably lock myself out of the house in panic instead of trying to find a safe place to hide with the others. Heck, I'd probably murdered by this serial murderer.
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Chanti on
Sunday, 5th October 2003 @ 04:02:43 PM AEST
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| Sick and twisted... but strangely beautiful at the same time. Crazy write Joel |
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Cancer on
Thursday, 9th October 2003 @ 08:10:01 PM AEST
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way to display your darker side. very impressive and realistic. i must admit, it was chilling. darkly hypnotic.
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by Broken_Skin on
Sunday, 16th November 2003 @ 05:24:50 PM AEST
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Beautifully wicked, im curious of the writer indeed, how are you feeling? x x x
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by carebear on
Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 01:04:33 AM AEST
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hunnie
this brought memeories back for me it was however very well written and I enjoyed ever bit of it just the memories however u did a amazling dark,scary job on this..-huggles him tight-
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Re: Your Screams Made me whole
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by sweetpeall on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 10:50:38 PM AEST
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| a very good write it was scary to me but it was really good loved it |
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