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UNCONTROLABLE (Tanka)
Contributed by
Del
on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 08:25:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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sweet moist warm kisses
filling senses with desire
igniting a flame
in my unsuspecting heart
passion uncontrolable
Copyright ©
Del
... [
2003-09-24 20:25:00] (Date/Time posted on
site)
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Re: UNCONTROLABLE (Tanka)
(User Rating: 1 ) by Walt on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 09:26:31 PM AEST (User
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Well done, great write |
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Re: UNCONTROLABLE (Tanka)
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ilhar on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 09:33:03 PM AEST (User
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short but potent , good write
Shari |
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Re: UNCONTROLABLE (Tanka)
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 10:21:42 PM AEST (User
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Out one syllable, nut nicely done!!!
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Re: UNCONTROLABLE (Tanka)
(User Rating: 1 ) by Marco on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 10:44:08 PM AEST (User
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I like the poem, it was a nice read and good for you to have a nice write about feelings and also it's good to see that you give the readers a feeling when you write your stuff. Keep it up and keep it hard.
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Re: UNCONTROLABLE (Tanka)
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 12:39:11 PM AEST (User
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This is inflammatory and vivid.
Good write. |
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