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Slit Jugular
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Thursday, 18th September 2003 @ 04:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I look outside the window
I see her swinging
So care-free, so innocently
A smile on her face
She is so beautiful
Tears start to fall
Not wanting to say good-bye
Not wanting my heart broken again
I mouth good-bye
Do a little wave
And plunge the knife,
And plunge the knife
Straight into my neck
I stagger backwards, then forward
My eyes blinking at the pain
Blood starts to spurt out
I see her big, puppy-like eyes
Glance at the window
Where I stand
The knife jutting from my neck
Like an ugly ornament
In mid-swing she screams
And pitches forward into the sand
She claws at it like a zombie
I wave good-bye at her again
My eyes boring holes into her like bullets
I see her face ripe with anguish
Trying to call me back from the grave
Her hand stretching out
Like a branch on a tree
I hit the floor with a thud
Still clutching the knife in my neck
I yank the knife out
And watch the blood spurt forth
Like it has a mission to complete
The blood stains the carpet
Along with my tears
Then I am aware of an infinite blackness
Except ever so faintly
Her anguished cries
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
... [
2003-09-18 16:05:00]
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by sicknivesevered on
Thursday, 18th September 2003 @ 04:08:11 PM AEST
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| Haha! I thought this was funny. Maybe I took it the wrong way. Whatever the case, excellent write. |
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by deadly_blaZe on
Thursday, 18th September 2003 @ 04:12:42 PM AEST
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wow joel... wut the hell inspired this one? i dont know what to say...
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by jaeann on
Thursday, 18th September 2003 @ 04:53:29 PM AEST
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| whoa......the last thing to hear.......wow....great write....... |
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by LovingWhispers on
Thursday, 18th September 2003 @ 07:11:55 PM AEST
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WOW !! This had my heart racing..Felt like I was watching a horror flick.Not sure what inspired it but sheesh....its awesome!
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by Cancer on
Friday, 19th September 2003 @ 08:01:53 PM AEST
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more brutal than usual, and i love it. very descriptive and morbid. what better way to say "i love you" than for her to be the last thing you see. funny, in a bizarre sort of way.
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by Avarice_Riot on
Saturday, 20th September 2003 @ 05:46:20 AM AEST
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| Not for the faint of heart is right. This is so fascinatingly morbid. What that girl must have done to make you want to take your life at a vantage point where she could see you... |
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 20th September 2003 @ 10:32:38 AM AEST
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| I'm almost speechless, I'm..hmm yea this was well written, and yes definatly not for the faint hearted. My heart was racing the whole time and I was stuck to the edge of my seat. I really don't know what to say about this poem. You described everything so well, I just hope you don't intend on doing anything like that in the future. I didn't really see a funny side to it, but then again I wasn't looking for one. Anyhow, great write. |
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by Ruby1987 on
Sunday, 21st September 2003 @ 09:39:09 AM AEST
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Cool and Twisted. Great write and i loved how the Knife was still in the Kneck until the near end. Truely Wicked Mate.
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by hardcoreputa on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 02:11:34 PM AEST
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| i have not read anything of yours in a while, i was starting to miss how dark and creepy you write... i loved it ~Apryl |
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Re: Slit Jugular
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by Chanti on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 10:50:29 PM AEST
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| Wow... twisted and amusing at the same time... i liked it. Very dark humour. |
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