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Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
Contributed by
LovingWhispers
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Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 10:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Another sip is taken,a cigarette burns away unattended
Cheers to the scarlet liquid,and the sorrow that consented
To the time spent dancing my lips,on the rim of a crystal kiss
Freefalling tears so warm,how appropriate for times like this
Lying here on satin sheets,flesh adorned in burgundy lace
I long for the smooth caress, of forgiveness in an embrace
With my every faltered breath,though more like a naked sigh
I release my pain in silent tears,in hope this hurt will say goodbye
Slowly casting guilt filled eyes,around this room,until they fall
Upon the candlelit silhouette,of the ghosts from tears before
Distant are the smiles,nearer to me now is deep despair
And to this empty feeling,only your death could compare
I play my tear kissed lips,upon the crystal,now refilled
And in the silence of my grieving,my breath is almost stilled
Watching as sheer curtains,dance before a pale moonlight
I stay this way,alone and lost,trapped in the dark of night
Another sip is taken,a cigarette burns away unattended
Cheers to the scarlet liquid,and the sorrow that consented
To the time spent dancing my lips,on the rim of a crystal kiss
Freefalling tears so warm,how appropriate for times like this
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LovingWhispers
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2003-09-16 10:05:00]
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by faffeee on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 10:14:09 AM AEST
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i loved it! you painted the picture so clearly, i could see it all in my head...i can't think of the words to describe it but this poem really took my breath away -
"Cheers to the scarlet liquid,and the sorrow that consented"
very very moving xxx
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 10:17:14 AM AEST
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breath taking flowing words beautiful
michelle |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by norm on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 10:28:57 AM AEST
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nicely written...
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I can't be sure why you are sad,
it might be 'cause you were bad,
If such the case, I won't be led,
You're not suppose to smoke in bed...
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by MoonlitAngel on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 11:48:49 AM AEST
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"Upon the candlelit silhouette,of the ghosts from tears before"
That line in particular is just brilliant!! I love the whole thing though. Filled me with a wonderful feeling of emptiness that I quite enjoyed. Great job.
~ Moonlit |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 12:08:57 PM AEST
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| my hearts a little heavy, tell me things are o.k with you. beautiful write. Crow |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 12:28:11 PM AEST
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beautifully written but heartwrenching...I hope for the best for you
Shari |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by jaeann on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 01:41:41 PM AEST
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| of forgiveness in an embrace.....yes...... |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by Walt on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 04:14:23 PM AEST
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| The words flow like the sweet wine and in time all will melt into beautiful poetry such as what is written here. Walt |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 06:35:46 PM AEST
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I loved this it was very good. I loved the imagery. Keep on writing.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by Fwog on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 07:20:38 PM AEST
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G'day LovingWhispers,
My God this is so beautiful, you have woven a quilt of life and love with this brilliant write.
Stop blowing me away with your magic,
Hugz
Dal |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 11:12:30 PM AEST
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Dear LW.
I'm concerned for you dear, and need to be reassured that I'm heard. Are you allright?
You are lost once again in your lovely river of words, that seems to flow over your whole room.
Where magic is being performed, and it's realities loom.
What a splendid poem....feeling, and touching, leaves an impression of doom!
Hope you will let us know?
lovingcritters, because we love you so! |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by DreamWeaver on
Wednesday, 17th September 2003 @ 02:51:41 AM AEST
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| Heartbreakingly beautiful ... your words have special meaning for me and you have woven them with sheer beauty ... I will be devastated if the love I know you treasure does not survive ... I pray that forgiveness and understanding during times that for you are extremely stressful will be forthcoming. All my hopes and love are with you both. ... Jan |
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Re: Scarlet Liquid,Crystal Kiss
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by PoloRM on
Wednesday, 17th September 2003 @ 11:03:05 PM AEST
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You've find the way to refill a glass
Sitting there and drinking with class
Throw the stick, get a cigar instead
Drop the wine, get tequila from Fred.
Better even, drop the cigar
I'll play for you on my guitar
Your tears have fell into our heart
Every word of this poem is a masterpiece art.
Dry down your tears, there's always a dawn
There's always a dawn just until we're gone. |
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