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Broken
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 11:35:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I've walked a million miles in these shoes
I've lost everything I ever had...
...And more besides
I've cried in my bed
Hot, angry tears foaming downwards
Pleading, bleeding for a way out of this mess
I've stared into death's face
And NOT backed down
The depression has dragged me under
I've fought and fallen and gotten back up
I've gone a thousand miles farther
How can you say I've not given enough?
My head has sagged with its burden
I've fought back the relentless ocean of tears
As others laugh at my empty jokes
My mind has screamed with the pressure
And silently wished death upon all around me
I'm lost in this desert, this maze
I've fought swinging blindly
At the demons which nip at me
I've finally given in accepting the peace they bring
Since God has forsaken me,
But their peace does not last
And God has turned His back on me
I've raised my bloodied, torn wrists
As a sort of symbol of my pain,
But that only shows my weakness
I'm crawling on my knees
Lost and alone my voice, a choked scream
Echoing back tormenting and mocking me
I'm staring into this void
Blood and dirt streaming from me
I can't find a way out of my cage
I'm battered down and my strength is sapped
Every time I try to rise
The storm is raging within
And I can't hold on any longer
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2003-09-14 23:35:00]
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Re: Broken
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by emystar on
Monday, 15th September 2003 @ 12:21:25 AM AEST
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Hi,
this is a very well written poem. It's sad that some of us have to fight this hard to find sanity but it's a good poem as it's full of gut wrenching, agony, not only from the mind but all the way to the core of ones being.
I can relate 2 this in many ways as I've lived with a chemical im balence in my brain and untill one Dr. finally came up with the right meds for me I suffered endlessly.
This write is more importent than u realize as it can help others understand what goes on inside ones depression.
Hang in there and try to get meds from your Dr. as they can make all the difference in the world. They can give u releif.
Hang tight,
emy
PRAYER, PEACE, JOY, LUV, |
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Re: Broken
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th September 2003 @ 03:36:34 AM AEST
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| Awesome write. So much anger and dispair. You are a talented poet. I wish you much peace and serenity in your journey. |
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Re: Broken
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by Ruby1987 on
Monday, 15th September 2003 @ 03:05:41 PM AEST
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Your poem took my breath away. I can't tell you how much i can relate to it, i wish i could find a way out of my cage. Keep writing coz i think your poetry can set me free from my cage.
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Re: Broken
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by EmSal on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 01:06:57 AM AEST
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If you can't hold on for yourself, find someone who you need to hold on longer for them, maybe by helping someone else you can help yourself. Just a thought. Your poem was awesome. You are a talented writer whether you agree with us or not. Thanks for sharing.
Emma. |
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Re: Broken
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th September 2003 @ 09:16:57 AM AEST
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| Amazing, just amazing. It's all I can say, this poem left me speechless. |
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Re: Broken
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by wyrd_faerie on
Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 12:20:03 PM AEST
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| this is one of the best poems you have written...i love it so, so much....beautiful... |
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