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Less Like You
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
on
Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 05:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I've tried my best
But it's never good enough
I've followed my heart
But it took me in circles around myself
My head is stressed
I've just about had enough
I guarded my heart
But you got in somehow so what's the point in trying?
If I can't even be who I always thought I was
And I can't even speak when words are all I have to give
The stars are fading
And the sky is blurring
And I can't even feel the rain coursing down my face
I'd hold you up
But I'm afraid I'm too weak
I try to be steady
But these selfish hands just won't stop trembling
I'm all cut up
And silent for fear I'll misspeak
I'm crying already
I wish I could scream and break this wall in front of me
If I can't even throw it in your face and make you see
And I can't even tell you all the ways it makes me feel
My memory's fading
My vision is blurring
And I can't even feel the burning tears the rain erased
Someday this won't be so bad
I'll stop feeling so sad
And I'll stand up on my own
Grow a little backbone
Be a little less like you
And a little more like me
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
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2003-09-14 17:05:00]
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Re: Less Like You
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 15th September 2003 @ 12:31:18 AM AEST
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Excellent write, Moonlit...
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Re: Less Like You
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by krismisevski on
Monday, 15th September 2003 @ 08:50:54 AM AEST
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I like the honesty of the poem. Very personal. I'm not sure the rhyming in the last stanza works well with the rest of the poem, which is wonderful. I think there are stronger words you could use instead of "BAD" and "SAD". Nice read.
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Re: Less Like You
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by EmSal on
Tuesday, 16th September 2003 @ 01:34:48 AM AEST
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Awesome write here Moonlit. What more can I say? It is something I can relate to, even though I didn't realise it at first that I wasn't me, that it wasn't good enough being me, but if I can do something about it then I can tell you, I'm sure you can too. So best wishes with that.
Love Emma. |
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