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Breathe
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
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Saturday, 13th September 2003 @ 06:45:00 PM in AEST
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Something placid lies on the floor
I'd like to think it a person
But those features are too distorted
So grotesque but beautiful to me
And it cries a soundless rivulet of raven tears
So eerily it sheds these black droplets
black as the night, black as the fall -
so quiescent it is for a moment
too silent that silence itself cannot be heard
then they erupt - what are they?
Dark branches sprouting from the tiny pools
Repulsive trees of the dark, bearing leaves
With nebulous faces, all wailing
All pleading for release, they
Just want to *breathe*.
Can't we breathe?
No time, no time
The earth is doomed to spin too fast
Shall we suffocate?
Yes, yes, yes
And in the process
I'll try...to breathe...life...into you...
Because if you breathe,
If I can see you breathe again,
I will be content
Even in death
Even in death
My friend.
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Re: Breathe
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 13th September 2003 @ 07:20:08 PM AEST
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this was amazing...
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Re: Breathe
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by MoonlitAngel on
Saturday, 13th September 2003 @ 11:39:43 PM AEST
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"too silent that silence itself cannot be heard"
Great stuff!
~ Moonlit |
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Re: Breathe
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by Ronald on
Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 02:01:09 AM AEST
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Breathe... Wow! I know a lot of songs with that title and now my my pal here has a poem entitled Breathe... Hey, I have a poem with that title too! Breathe... nice title
And your poetry is just great. You paint the picture vividly with your words. I like the way you use your words. Great piece of art over here! Keep the going going pal! |
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Re: Breathe
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by shelby on
Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 03:26:25 AM AEST
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vivid details to this poem I understand this moe than you know.Enjoyed reading it!
michelle |
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Re: Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 05:57:52 AM AEST
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| You are a awesome poet. Truly amazing. Great poem. |
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Re: Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th September 2003 @ 01:59:16 PM AEST
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"The earth is doomed to spin too fast"
great write... |
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Re: Breathe
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 03:10:14 AM AEST
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icy you have many more comments then me. you must be a better poet.
but seriously folks,
the peice? i enjoyed it, very inquisitive, probing , kind of anguished...
cheers,
C+ |
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Re: Breathe
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by wyrd_faerie on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 10:42:08 AM AEST
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All pleading for release, they
Just want to *breathe*.
Can't we breathe?
No time, no time
The earth is doomed to spin too fast
Shall we suffocate?
Yes, yes, yes
And in the process
I'll try...to breathe...life...into you...
f****** excellent. |
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