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Cold, cold rain
Contributed by
hazelnut
on
Friday, 12th September 2003 @ 05:35:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The clouds swirl, a storm brewing
Infinite blackness in the skies
Like the black pools of emptiness in my eyes
Windows to the soul no longer
For my soul has been ripped out
By an insatiable hunger
Rivulets of rain begin to slide
Down my cheeks on either side
Mixed with burning tears
There was no holding back
For the dam has broken, releasing a personal flood
The tears of heaven pelted, sweat and blood
Running was not an option
Hiding was an illusion
So I stood, soaked to the skin
And wondered when did the nightmare begin
The light at the end of the tunnel flickered, dimmed
Died, along with the sliver of hope that warmed my soulless body
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hazelnut
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2003-09-12 17:35:00]
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Re: Cold, cold rain
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by sicknivesevered on
Friday, 12th September 2003 @ 05:40:47 PM AEST
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| Very good. I like your style. |
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Re: Cold, cold rain
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 12th September 2003 @ 05:47:09 PM AEST
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beautiful..
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Re: Cold, cold rain
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by EmSal on
Saturday, 13th September 2003 @ 04:41:05 AM AEST
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Another sad write from you, but I relate with the sad ones so this poem was also awesome...thanks for sharing.
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Re: Cold, cold rain
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 14th September 2003 @ 07:20:48 PM AEST
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this was awesome and very poetic. I liked all the comparisons. Very well written.
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Re: Cold, cold rain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th September 2003 @ 02:17:37 PM AEST
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| great write... |
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