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Depression's Song
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Monday, 8th September 2003 @ 11:45:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Bitter, angry, complacent
This world leaves me with nothing
My mouth moves silently,
As I scream inwardly
Sick of being pushed around
By the perverse whims of the world
Drowning, trying to pull myself up
I fell cause of my own stupidity
I'm never closer to being free
Surrounded by demons cursing my name
There in my head can't chase them away
They hunt me and tear me down like a pack of wolves
And gloat over their beaten, bloodied prize
I'm losing control of myself
Every breath is an effort
There's a pool of blood in my hands
From my severed veins
I never meant it to be like this!
Hiding in a corner
Averting your steady gaze
I'm bloody and sore
My insecurities batter my weak defenses
I can't fight anymore
Can't place my depression
On any one source
I'm sick of stumbling
That's the only thing I know
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bobotheclown
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2003-09-08 11:45:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Depression's Song
(User Rating: 1 ) by POOBEAR on
Monday, 8th September 2003 @ 12:23:20 PM AEST (User
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Well written and graphic. I can really
feel the pain that these words are
screaming out.Please don't give in to
this song.Really touched me.
Take care,
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Re: Depression's Song
(User Rating: 1 ) by Broken-glass on
Monday, 8th September 2003 @ 12:43:49 PM AEST (User
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Wow this poem is amazing. I like the way you write, I'm gonna try and work my way through all your poems sometime. Good work!
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Re: Depression's Song
(User Rating: 1 ) by Chanti on
Monday, 8th September 2003 @ 12:57:29 PM AEST (User
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Joel, beautiful and tragic at the same time. Dont let the demons inside you take over your life. Very bittersweet.
- Chanti - - * |
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Re: Depression's Song
(User Rating: 1 ) by afraid_of_fear on
Monday, 8th September 2003 @ 01:38:58 PM AEST (User
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Joel, this has such dark, yet beautiful imagery, and it felt as though i was being drawn into the poem itself.. I loved the second from last stanza best, but it was all great..
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Re: Depression's Song
(User Rating: 1 ) by roisin on
Monday, 8th September 2003 @ 04:09:13 PM AEST (User
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when you stumble,
may the clay dance,
to balance you.......words from "beannacht" a blessing, that was given me earlier this month...
hugs joel
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Re: Depression's Song
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th September 2003 @ 05:27:36 PM AEST (User
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Very well written.
"Surrounded by demons cursing my name
There in my head can't chase them away
They hunt me and tear me down like a pack of wolves
And gloat over their beaten, bloodied prize"
Great stanza. Great poem! |
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Re: Depression's Song
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rain on
Friday, 24th October 2003 @ 09:29:20 AM AEST (User
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i liked this very much. it reminds me of myself or how i was not long ago when i felt the only thing i was good at was hiding in the corner fighting back the tears and sliceing up my wrists. but im over that now. about time to only took me 3 years, lol. well i liked the poem alot.
~sara~ |
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