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East Street Murder
Contributed by
TeenageEmoGirl
on
Tuesday, 2nd September 2003 @ 12:35:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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A warehouse abandoned
Just three miles of East Street
A young girl travels to her death
Thrown to the concrete
Unconscious into the building
Wakes up bound and taped
Just lies there waiting for it to end
As she is ravaged and raped
A drop of blood drips down her face
Onto her naked chest
Once he's done she's untied
He tells her to get dressed
Takes her to the boiler room
And cuffs her to a bed
A sledgehammer to her gut
A round of bullets to her head
Her blonde hair is soaked in red
With sweet revenge he did slay
Gives her lips one last kiss
Then guiltfree he drives away
To a life she didn't want
For a life she denied
For a world she rejected
Is the reason that she died
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TeenageEmoGirl
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2003-09-02 00:35:00]
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Re: East Street Murder
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd September 2003 @ 01:33:51 AM AEST
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| I'm not a person to be left speechless,but wow! Not because of the graphic nature,but the delicate,yet pain-stricken,words. Daring and beautiful. Beautiful poem. |
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Re: East Street Murder
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by Jason_Robert_Britt on
Tuesday, 2nd September 2003 @ 02:13:28 AM AEST
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| Vivid, creative, and it flowed well, the last four verses put meaning to the rest of the poem; she died because of her own choices... I liked the plot twist. Great job! |
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Re: East Street Murder
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by jaeann on
Tuesday, 2nd September 2003 @ 12:23:30 PM AEST
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| inciteful.....riveting.....a sense of futility....the flow is amazing.....telling a simple story of a savage death....there's a lot of things i want to say.....but i'm left without the right words..... |
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Re: East Street Murder
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 2nd September 2003 @ 08:48:17 PM AEST
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This was good although it wasn't all that graphic. I like the irregular rhyme scheme. Keep it up.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: East Street Murder
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th September 2003 @ 05:35:26 AM AEST
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| I really don't know what to say. I have been in the girls position, but was blessed enough not to lose my life, tho it still really hurt. This poem brought back memories, yet it is such a great write. |
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