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Last Rain
Contributed by
jaeann
on
Monday, 1st September 2003 @ 12:35:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Summer storm
begins to form
outside my head
from my heart
to my bed.
Lightening bolts
give me jolts
across the field
through the woods
past my shield.
Darkened clouds
heavy and proud
like the pain
in my chest
nothing sustains.
Cold wet rain
bound in chains
gossamer light sheets
dripping down thighs
lost in defeat.
Billowing wind
where do I send
the fallen leaves
that summer left
where do I cleave?
Impending darkness
assaulted starkness
enters my heart
chains me in bed
stolen from the start.
Whirlpool of heat
where can we meet
to quench the thirst
I'll not die
before I burst.
Save me before the winter comes
before I come all undone
rush to the side
save my soul
from the tide.
Copyright ©
jaeann
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2003-09-01 00:35:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Last Rain
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ronald on
Monday, 1st September 2003 @ 12:51:40 AM AEST (User
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I like the emotions running through this poem. Makes me feel kind of mellow too. Anyway, good work of poetry here. |
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Re: Last Rain
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ilhar on
Monday, 1st September 2003 @ 01:10:39 AM AEST (User
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very well done nice use of imagery
Shari |
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Re: Last Rain
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st September 2003 @ 02:58:48 AM AEST (User
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Emotions,emotions,emotions.I could envision the storm within your very soul.This is what true poetry is all about. Great writing. |
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Re: Last Rain
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Monday, 1st September 2003 @ 03:23:30 AM AEST (User
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Rain of emotions.. welldone..venkat |
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Re: Last Rain
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Monday, 1st September 2003 @ 09:55:26 AM AEST (User
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a flowing emotional write here with many great details and images very enjoyable.
michelle |
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Re: Last Rain
(User Rating: 1 ) by Crow on
Monday, 1st September 2003 @ 09:05:32 PM AEST (User
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jaeann your work always has a great effect on me. I look foward to it. good write Crow |
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Re: Last Rain
(User Rating: 1 ) by JamesStockdale on
Tuesday, 8th September 2020 @ 07:32:08 PM AEST (User
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Beautiful flow
Very impressive poem.
i/'/m already a fan... |
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