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Visions in the Blood
Contributed by
crimson_purity
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Monday, 25th August 2003 @ 07:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Cold sweat pouring down a pale face,
Sickening perspiration of a guilt-ridden child,
Falls from a trembling chin,
Quivering for the pain that conceals all,
Delivered unto this filthy hand,
With which I write this worthless rant,
As it fights to resist the irresistable,
Sweet temptation, a glistening blade,
Nothing can silence the irreplaceable urge,
Red, so telling, visions int he blood,
Remind, oh god, remind me of the time,
The restless inner truth,lies diseased,
And dying,slowly, but it is still there,
A glimmer of life, of hope maybe,
But no, just false compensation,
Stolen mutterings of a distant fantasy,
There is no longer the lingering desire to repent,
Just the bitter, bitter acceptance.
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Re: Visions in the Blood
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 25th August 2003 @ 07:12:55 AM AEST
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I laughed at your comment, but after reading it over three times i wasn't laughing just staring wide-eyed wondering where you got the inspiration to write this masterpiece. This was great and the imagery... I lack the word to describe it... vivid... Wow I'm stunned... I feel like hugging some people...
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Re: Visions in the Blood
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by ArdRi79 on
Monday, 25th August 2003 @ 09:29:02 AM AEST
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| This is an amazing poem, truely intense the imagery and its heavy with painfull truth It doesnt make me feel like hugging 0.o |
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Re: Visions in the Blood
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by tease_whizz on
Monday, 25th August 2003 @ 03:38:17 PM AEST
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| a dark and deeply raw write, i really enjoyed this. the feelings are intense, brutally honest and effectively communicated with the reader. welcome to YPDC - you might like some of my poetry so feel free to check it out. hope to read more from you soon. Be strong, art saves....Kate x |
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Re: Visions in the Blood
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by afraid_of_fear on
Monday, 25th August 2003 @ 09:07:10 PM AEST
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I know what joel means about hugging - i feel the same, but want to hug you most of all Jen..
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Re: Visions in the Blood
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by Jason_Robert_Britt on
Tuesday, 26th August 2003 @ 05:43:24 AM AEST
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Yes, hugging them to death... great imagry and creativity.
"There is no longer the lingering desire to repent,
Just the bitter, bitter acceptance."
What an important line, very real and tangible. Excellent piece, I am looking forward to more. |
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