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Dark
Contributed by
CrimsonTearz
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Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 06:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The room is empty
The walls are closing in
My eyes are red
Tears are flowing
Blood is dripping
I take in my last breath
All I see is black
Like the empty space inside of me
Death is the only answer
Nothing else will cure this pain
Life is not important
Nothing here for me
The pain is overbearing
I can't conceal how I feel
I let the tears flow
The walls close in
Tears stop flowing
As life ends
I see nothing
I hear my shallow breathing
Life is ending
The pain is gone
No more tears
No more blood
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2003-08-14 18:05:00]
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Re: Dark
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by vince on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 06:31:43 PM AEST
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| nice poem for a 11 years old ... keep goin |
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Re: Dark
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by Saira on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 09:50:46 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC Friend!
This is sad but a very good write...especially for a 11 years old. Keep up the good work!
Saira |
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Re: Dark
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by jaeann on
Friday, 15th August 2003 @ 05:16:16 AM AEST
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| you wrote this when you were eleven ........profound darkness emanates from your work......welcome.....i look forward to more.....i hope there's light now where you are........ |
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Re: Dark
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 16th August 2003 @ 10:25:38 PM AEST
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Beautifully written, a well done poem.
Darkness radiates from it, it held me from beginnig to end, I liked this poem, keep it up. |
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Re: Dark
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by Nsa on
Friday, 12th September 2003 @ 10:04:50 PM AEST
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| Better comments than any of the ones I get lol. Well, it is a pretty good poem, and excellent for a little pipsqueak 11 year old |
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