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Floored
Contributed by
jaeann
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Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 07:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Vague.....
You say I'm vague.
No way to tell
where I start......where I stop?
If i'm on the bottom or the top.....
If I've added or I've dropped....
Was I vague when I said I wanted you?
Was I vague when I offered the key?
Was I vague when I opened myself up to you?
Was I vague with all my pleas?
You say that you want me....but just the parts you can see....
because if you had all of me
you couldn't even breathe.....
The test you failed is not the one you think...
giving me a chance to run free....
no dear ...
it was the day you handed me back the key.
Can you not see?
That all I ever wanted from you
was to understand the hidden parts of me....
Am I still being vague?
Copyright ©
jaeann
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2003-08-12 19:05:00]
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Re: Floored
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by POOBEAR on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 07:19:16 PM AEST
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I like this alot. It is certainly his loss
and you got your point across
very well and should hit him like
a wake up call. Giddyup!!!
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Re: Floored
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by Saira on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 08:20:59 PM AEST
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This is a very good, Jaeann, and well expressed write. I liked it!
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Re: Floored
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 09:00:58 PM AEST
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| Great poem ... love the way you wrote this... Jan |
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Re: Floored
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 13th August 2003 @ 06:32:19 AM AEST
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| I must repeat the comments Dreamweaver and Saira. it is well expressed... venkat |
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Re: Floored
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by Crow on
Wednesday, 13th August 2003 @ 05:07:24 PM AEST
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| very good write, Crow |
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