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If I could ever go back
Contributed by
knowWhat_kind
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Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 07:05:00 AM in AEST
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Rainbows butterflys peace signs they all fill my eyes, a shadow I am hidden beneath won't let me shine my vibe
Desperate, delirious willing to try something new, can you give me what I'm looking for, just a little deliverance of my spirit
Music writes poem actions maybe a little distraction to get my peace life going
I can't get started with an afterglow in my head
what am I getting started....I thought it was a road I was walking down a road that leads to hippie town, it never took me there if you want to know....no it took me to a 1987 road
With all my care and all my might I want so much to go back in time
with rainbows butterflys and peace signs filling my eyes
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Re: If I could ever go back
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by jaeann on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 07:39:55 AM AEST
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| this has a really cool vibe to it.... |
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Re: If I could ever go back
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by garyh on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 07:57:11 AM AEST
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hmmm.... maybe try to put a rhythm to it, and try to make stanzas/lines... don't just write it like a paragraph.... poetry is not only just emotions... but also about rhythm...
so if i sounded harsh... but i just wanted you to know... because many people don't like reading things like this... please fix it and repost it.... |
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Re: If I could ever go back
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 12th August 2003 @ 08:00:59 PM AEST
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close you eyes
go back in time
light a candle
write a rhyme,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: If I could ever go back
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by CrucifiedAndLeft2Die on
Wednesday, 14th January 2004 @ 11:02:06 PM AEST
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| this was cool, oh how i wish i could go back into time too...if I figure out how I’ll let you know ok. Smiles. |
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